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Omega Bill
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Post by Omega Bill »

[font=Comic Sans MS]If insanity is reality, then I must be crazy for being true
Everyone too lazy, its amazing how only you rep you
No credit where credit is due, u know who I said it to
Chest fulla holes, dont test, they say I go hardest on roids
Rep they best at TEXT, thats like bein the smartest mongloid
Fuckin kids lookin up to with quotes like "Oh how he soared"
Ya aint shit in person, u hurtin in life, hard only wit a keyboard
Used to give a shit, used to be real into all this sick internet spit
Realization hit, halfa them only use their fingas and neva their lips
I never lived in the streets, Ill still live alright standin on both feet
U didnt grow up hood either, talkin like u did dont make you unique
Makes you look weak, and thats where the truth rears its head
U sign offline n wear ya $80 jeans and rest in ya queen size bed
Prolly never been in a project, u need slapped so you see straight
Guaranteed today, u only in the ghetto turnin wrong offa freeway
A lot of dudes fake, u can say I am, its true I just wanted a taste
But unlike most, I dont strut on the net with pants below my waist
You think ur gonna go places? Around the world n see tons of faces?
You cant connect with the ghetto, u cant even begin to touch bases
U high on life now, ur soarin, but where u gonna go when space hits?
Sorry, but you know you cant be honest with yourself when u face this[/font]

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Post by Dead Silence »

very nice billy boy very nice..


loved the theme/topic
everything seemed legit.

but the only thing wrong that i saw was the way u worded things.

like it was very choppy in chunks of it. it coulda been the wording or what. maybe add some comas in it?
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

This Piece Was Decent, it Started Off Nice, But Then ..
Idk Kinda Fell Off Towards Tha End ..
Picked Up a Little in Tha End ..
But Tha Closer Was Lame To Me ..
Overall Decent Piece, This Drop Has Been Done Millions Of Times,
So When U Spit Bout it U Gotta Come Harder
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.. it`s S.a.W Bitches ..
.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

JayGUNNa
RELL FiaSCO

aRViNCiBLE
SCiP
MiiLZ

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Post by MadKNiFe »

From ma pointa-view, it was cool. . on point. i'd say a 8/10
[align=center]?como quiere pagar?

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Simple genius[/align]
-MiiLz.

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Post by -MiiLz. »

... This Was Kinda Basic ...
... Is Dis Topic About Your Life Or Summin ?? ...
... This Was Deep, Sounded Lyk U Had Experience in This ...
... This "SHIT" Reminds Me Of U, Meaning Ur An True Lyricist ...
... Anyways This is The Feedback Dont Start Actin Lyk Ur Keystyles ...
... ima Rate This -5/10, This is Part Of The Reason Hip Hop Is Dead Though ...
... Must Admit Thought i Was Hearin A Bedtime Story From This Whackness Bro ...
... One Of The Most Basic And Boring Drops ive Seen So Far ...
... Any ways Keep Up With Ya Riding And Shit Talkin Online Fam
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-MiiLz. wrote:... This Was Kinda Basic ...
... Is Dis Topic About Your Life Or Summin ?? ...
... This Was Deep, Sounded Lyk U Had Experience in This ...
... This "SHIT" Reminds Me Of U, Meaning Ur An True Lyricist ...
... Anyways This is The Feedback Dont Start Actin Lyk Ur Keystyles ...
... ima Rate This -5/10, This is Part Of The Reason Hip Hop Is Dead Though ...
... Must Admit Thought i Was Hearin A Bedtime Story From This Whackness Bro ...
... One Of The Most Basic And Boring Drops ive Seen So Far ...
... Any ways Keep Up With Ya Riding And Shit Talkin Online Fam
Is that kid Bi Polar?one fucking extreme to the other..Hater
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Post by -ViP »

Dress2Kill

Wdf is You Talking About There Nothing You Can Hate On This Shit,
it Was just A Story Rap But it Wasnt That Good,
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Post by Omega Bill »

^^^Yall postin from the same IP Address, so dropping 2 hate feeds is just stupid, haha.

Thanks for the feed.
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-MiiLz.

Post by -MiiLz. »

Lol ..Ok Newb
Half Tha Ppl Here Kno Were Not Same Person
Stop With Ur Bullshit ..Lol
And Stop Bitchin Because i Didnt Like Ur Text
You Little Fruit Cake.
-MiiLz.

Post by -MiiLz. »

P.s. Now U Can Say Were At Same i.p.
-MiiLz.

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And Your Welcome For The Feed.
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Post by Haz »

Millz ..
I Fuck With You...
But Fall Back From Bill And Dress2Kill...
And Vipa you Flaming Homo Ass Niggah..
Know Your Roll.. you got Sonned By Dead Silence...

R.I.P BITCH ...
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