Lawgix - Song Of The Serpent

[Lawgix]

okay man its been while since i've been on here... but i recorded this shit.. and i want some feed... and i figured i'd get it no better place than Illest Lyrics.. so PLEASE lemme know what u think!!!! i worked hard on it!!!! thanx guys... i know its a prolly gay title but meh idgaf lmfao

[- Mutual -]

is that it u come on here fo feed well fuck off
nah jk it was pretty decent had a nice flow and the emotion was great to go wit it hope ya keep'em comin

[Lawgix]

thanx man i most deff will... thanx for the feed br0

[B-Bear]

First things first.. u need a pop filter.. haha

Second, the traack... for being the first recording it's good.. def good.. didn't feel the overdub at the start.. i would've erased that, cause u need to be good at mixing to make that sound really good.. and u need to get a better mic.. lol.. away from the critiscm and on to the sweet stuff

flow on point, steady emotion.. good presence and delivery, lyrics are tight.. overall, it's impressing.. especially conseidering u've prolly done it all by yourself.. keep it up

[Lawgix]

yeah just me n cool edit pro haha but i work with what i got ya know? i don't have the cash to fork out for a studio quality mic or else i would... most fuckin deff i would... i gotta homie that says i can come to his house n record professionally n i'm really thinkin bout doin it... thanx for the word of advice!!! means alot man!!! and no its not my "first" recording but its one of the better ones i've posted on Illest... lol but thanx newayz bruh... keep ya head up!!! lookin for more feed plzzz!!!!!!

[Dead Silence]

not bad.not bat at all.

is this ur very first track?
if so its grade A for a first one.

ur flow came off in some places.
Lyrics were real good.

i wasnt feelin the chorus. dont like ones that repeat the same line all the time.

[Lawgix]

thanx guys most deff some pointers i will work on nah it wasn't my first audio just one i wanted to put on IL.. i'm sure i got another one on here somewhere haha thanx for the feed guys!!!

[iLLrated]

yea for a first track this is nice fo sho Im not gonna break it down sounds like peeps basically told u whats wrong... good shit

[Kurse]

I already told you what I thought about this track on MSN.

Hook needed more work! Alot more work! haha

But as for you, flow and swagg wise...you definately upp'd your game! It's real noticable. U were aiight before, but I see you've definately been workin on ur delivery and it shows! Hat's off to you pimpin!

Nice choice in beat too. Good concept. I'll give this one a 7/10.

[~Symbolikull~]

yo my homie mos def better quality, still need that pop filter or back up from the mic tho. nice flow and the point was well written it was clear that this had happened fo reel. emotion and mic prescense has elevated.... ima getta hold of you some how tho

[Lawgix]

thanx man... yeah the hook was just a quick thing i did... cause i SUCK at hooks... as you can tell... haha... Kurse... thank you much man... its appreciated for sure!! i always look for ur point of views n shit homie... Ghost... contact me netime dude... as for the rest of ya... thanx for the up lifting words and advise!!! i've been hella busy doin shit... hopefully i'ma get a job soon... *prays* lol... but i was dj'in online for a while but i stopped that to pursue in seeking REAL employment lol and i hope it has payed off... if i get this job i'ma most deff get some fuckin recording equipment n take my pc with me and go to my homies house where i got peace and quiet... and up my level of recording... but thats all in the future and i'm not lookin too far into just yet... but newayz thats my update!! get at me for nething if ya need somethin!! ya'll probably still got my MSN if ya don't i'm still at [email protected] or my YIM is djdyzzy... hit me up!!!

peace