Two Lost Souls

[-TraMaTiK-]

well i havent dropped anything text in a while,especially not a poem or story. so i was in a writing mood and wud like to share with u this story i made up lastnight. leave some feed if u wud and a link to whatever u want read and commented on. here it is.

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It's 5 in the morning. Two people from two different worlds are bound together fighting,arguing,tearing,at one another. The stars are still heavy in the sky glistening and illuminating the tears from both of their faces. Whispers caught in the wind as the fight rages on. He screams she cries, she screams he cries. They both go silent as the night grows dim and shades of light are seen, causing stripes within the sky. Peeking through the tree tops are rays of sunlight as dawn begins, but the fight between these two doesnt stop. She declares she's leaving her home because nothing would ever work out between them. Caught up in silence, he does the only thing he knows how to do, fight. Flames burning in his eyes as each minute grows thin, he disregards the fact there's millions of other people around. Pacing in his house scared,crying,hurt and alone, he packs his bags and heads out. She on the other hand still stands by her statement of leaving. Two lost souls trying to connect in a world where the sky fades away and the grass grows brown, oceans dry up and flowers wither away and die. There screams of sorrow could wake the dead if not make Jesus rise himself. Driven by emotion that they both try to lock away, yet knowing if they leave it will be for good. He continues his walk to the bus station looking at the newly brighten sky. Clouds gather blocking the sun making the ground cold, as she herself struggles to stay alive inside. Feelings spill from her eyes in the form of tears, staining the land with pain and regret. Getting closer to the bus stop the man says 'i hope its worth killing the only thing i believed in.' Her jaw drops and she stands frozen in time, motionless not knowing what to do. She didn't say but its clear at this point she'd rather be laying in the ground rather then on-top of it. He watches the bus inch toward him with regret eating his soul alive. She bursts out with a cry that shook the heavens and rattled hell. Feeling completely torn he steps away watching the bus leaving without him rushing to her aid. Tear drops explode from both of their eyes pouring out like waterfalls. The fire in their hearts ignites once again and they re-unite under a velvet sky. The silence is broken with soft mumbling and cries. Both ripped apart by the words exchanged earlier, yet feeling safe and comfortable in each others arms. Will this love make it to see tomorrow? Or will it be drowned in a sea of pain and disappear?

[- Mutual -]

damm this flowed extemely well
when i read it
was deep stuff
nice story
9.5/10
good shit

all of it was my fave bit so ya know
keep'em comin

[-TraMaTiK-]

thanks man,uppin

[LadySam]

I liked this, i could imagine the whole scene in my mind.
No quotes but it was good overall.
Bout to read Part two.

[5 mics]

imagery was nice dude, painting pictures threw words in my opinion good shyt 8/10