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Post by Subsist »

oh sorry thought this was your freestyle.

anyways.

you need someone to mix your track better so it doesnt give the listener brain damage and you get some feed. try viral or dj or kurse. dunno.
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Post by Cee4 »

yeah this was decent. good choice of beat (i aint heard that song in ages) the flow was decent too..the delivery coulda been better..u kinda mumbled a bit on the odd occassion but it was still a decent couple of verses. i was feelin the second verse more than the first
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Post by -MiiLz. »

Lol Dude That Shit is Ghetto ..How U Got The Beat But Hey, i Liked This Song Even Though it Wasnt Mixed. But Next Time Mix it Or Atleast Add "Reverb". But Defiantly A Good Choice In The Beats..This Is One Of Ur Tracks U Flowed The Best in, You Had Nice Metaphors, Also Dont Listen To What Subsist is Sayin ..About That Brain Damage Bull Shit. He Just Mad Because When Hes On A Track His Flow Sounds Like its Running Away. But Anyways Dude This Sounds Like Some Nice Shit like U Know What U Was Talking About. " ill Smoke Until My Brains is Chronik" etc ..Anyways Nice Track Keep Dropping
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Post by - Mutual - »

the beat was great the lyrics were straight
ya flow was good ya delivery was pretty good
good stuff
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by iLLrated »

not bad but the beat quality really does kill it for me, kind of a cliche beat to use anyways, and how can u not have a program to d/l a beat?? Anyways it was decent
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Post by HKX »

i like da title of da track i was finna use dat on a track but now i cant lol dis would've sounded dope if u would've mixed it up right lol u should've hollered at viral but most def dis shit is ghetto as hell u snapped recordin da beat off youtube shit when i was 13 dats wat we did we recorded beats off da sound recorder and looped them wat ever got da track mixed down we did it lol much props my nigga lol
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Post by Lawgix »

its nice i the beat of course one of my personal favs... lyrics were good... it wasn't bad... work on delivery...

6/10

nice job homie
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Post by -ViP »

LOL SUBSIST AN IDIOT, This Aint To Short FOr Feed Back I Like Yo Flow In The Beggining "I Smoke Nearly An O A Day, The ****** ***** Get Thrown Away, Smoke Ls Till I'm Blown Away, I'm in My Zone Today", You Doing A Nice Flow,
The Lyrics Is Not Bad At All...Just Have To Mix it Or Make Yo Music Sound Betta..,
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Post by Kurse »

Man that beat takes me wayyyy back. Good choice in beat. The only thing I don't like about it is the fact that it takes about a decade to get into the damn song in the beginning! haha

Other than that...lyrically. Very well written. I'd give the lyrics a 7.5/10...maybe 8/10. You fell off at certain points, but you have a very unique flow. It's like as soon as one bar is done, FUCK BREATHING, we're jumpin into the next bar! haha But I like that...you fit alot more lyrics in that way.

I was glad to hear 2 verses, and not 1...cuz i know how alot of other audio artists here on illest (with the exception of my labelmates), like to stop after 1 verse! That shit drives me nuts!!! I don't wanna hear niggaz drop a "1-verse-track" like once an month and call themselves an 'audio artist'.

Sad to see you go off into the Military mayne. U were just gettin more into audio and less in the text. But hopefully we'll hear from you down the road!

This was one of ur better tracks in my opinion so overall I'ma give it a 7/10. Only reason I don't go more is because there are parts in the song were u seem'd hesitant to get into the next bar. It only happens a few times, but it's noticable. But definately keep elevating and doin you J.
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

shit this was your best track ive heard from you... thats all im sayin
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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Post by Miilz »

Hey JJ, Viral Dont Get on That Much But If You Need Mixing
Get A Dynamic Microphone, Then i'll Get You Booth Quality But..
Yeah Send Me Ya Vocals To Though, No Matter What Mic YOu Got
i'll Get You Some Better Mixing ..Thats If Viral Or Nobody Else
Is Around To Mix it ..I Got Nice Quality Better Then Previous
Tracks Even Though "Get Lost" Sounds Like Professional Quality.
i Can Still Top That!
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Post by JollyJay »

the beat was nice. ya rhyming isnt bad. but u need to up ya delivery a bit and ur flow was on point for most of it but fell off a bit. this could be a nice tune if u upped the quality a bit more and put a bit more emotion in ya delivery.
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Post by Glamtrash »

Holy shit kid, remember to breathe! I like this a lot, it's definitely the best audio track you've dropped. I would have liked it a lot better if you had actually taken the time to mix it properly, but hey. I suppose that going away to basic training is an alright out. Again, nice choice of beat. I haven't heard that shit in years. All in all I give this an 8/10. Good shit guy, keep 'em comin.
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Post by Haz »

This Was Straight Homie, Coo Pick of a Instrumental..
Second verse Was Betta... Gotta Sorta Mad Flow... Sounds like u Wanna
Go On a Rampage LOL.. But It Was Coo.. Faget Wud People Say Bout da Quality.
u Puttin in Work Family.. Try N Speed Up ya Flow Nex time i Wanna See Wut u SOund like... Coo Dough For a Few Verses..

u Deffo Improvin..

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Post by Viral »

dis shit was pretty good man...didnt know u ever posted this up...its from awhile back..hahaha..good shit..da mixin obviously coulda been better as already stated..ur lyrics were dope tho..ur flow was pretty straight..some parts here n there it seemed off..but it could just be me..dont know why u havent dropped more shit...get on it maaannn..haha..n gimme a holler if u need ne mixin n wat not
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