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Brah-Vo
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So rusty ..

Post by Brah-Vo »

aint written in a while


2,1,2

Raiza sharpe strait out the blue
out the sheath ditched heat clean kicks clean sliced feet
make ya bleed with ease
Money from the rap game only feed my greed
it only feed my needs to escape
as you plead with weed to take
away that need to feed

Ya get me?

They told me i aint got the voice to rap
but the niggaz u be supportin hmm well them boys was whack
they say that asians aint allowed to spit
who says im apart of "they"? the world is my toilet
in that crowd i shit
In a sad ateempt to put smiles on frownin kids
Its his "Final Fantasy" coz cloud got hitched
Like will smith, when he was on that ill shit
Man u know i miss that wild bill shit
Like a freedom fighter dreamin of an ak-47
who despised the cross but prayed to the crescent
he didnt go to school for knowledge or the lessons
But for the use of pro tools and the detonators he would be pressin .



PEACE.


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Upon further revision, ^^^ above piece was kinda lame. Flow is abit off too. Its for audio :D

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Post by - Mutual - »

well it's not bad it was a simple vocab n everythin but an audio of this might sound better welcome back
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by Arvincible »

Raiza!! Lol we thought u died...and laughed but anyways glad to see u back on the board...

This piece has a pretty good flow, I really caught it, and some dope concepts and surprisingly u seem to have improved a lot on ur multis...
Keep it up man
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