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I need some feedback on this and how it could be better , also mention each guys faults and stuff thanks alot , im the one in the middle.
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this beat is wack its techno bpm homie, nobodys even on beat slow that shit down to at least 100 bpm
you came the best the last dude was mumbling and shit, it was weak lyrically
you came the best the last dude was mumbling and shit, it was weak lyrically
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first n 3rd guy sounded like dey were losing there breath the whole time...urs was the best one...like killah said lyrically it was weak...ur presentation was pretty decent tho....u should get on a track alone that way people can hear wat uve really got instead of a short 12 or so...wasnt really lookin for the bars...but i like that mountain dew can part..haha it was jst funny...ne ways...keep it up and im sure ull get alot better...the beat wasnt horrible...but it was too fast and thats y im sure it seemed like the guys were diein from lack of oxygen
n where is AD?
n where is AD?
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what bpm did you make it cause thats really fast or its just a fucked up drum pattern
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
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yeah nobody was saying that but just hitting the snares doesn't mean you're on beat lmao listen to most techno the vocals aren't really fast at all its just singing over a fast drum pattern but they're ON BEAT, you're not on beat when you miss 80% of the kicks
none of ya'll got heavy accents so theirs potential just work on your lyrics, presence & flows
none of ya'll got heavy accents so theirs potential just work on your lyrics, presence & flows
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
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the lower drum in the beat lol the kick is the bassy type drum and the snare is the more high pitched clap type sounding drum lmao
most beats in rap are between 80-100 bpm, if you make anything faster it'll sound horrible, even the beats speed rappers use aren't really high bpm
most beats in rap are between 80-100 bpm, if you make anything faster it'll sound horrible, even the beats speed rappers use aren't really high bpm
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
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odd beat. so this is lebanese rap? anyway...
all of you were off beat. you were close though. All of you need more emotion in it, dont just speak the verse, put some heart into it. and yeah it was lyrically weak. You also should make the volume of the vocal tracks higher, but it could just be that yall were speaking low. so, plenty of room for improvement, but keep dropin and youll get better.
all of you were off beat. you were close though. All of you need more emotion in it, dont just speak the verse, put some heart into it. and yeah it was lyrically weak. You also should make the volume of the vocal tracks higher, but it could just be that yall were speaking low. so, plenty of room for improvement, but keep dropin and youll get better.
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