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[font=Comic Sans MS]Everyone has a hero, and repetition is flattery
Reenactment of his idol, with assaults nd battery
Saddenly disturbed, never listening to a word
Only screams from her lungs is all he ever heard
A deed from his head, voices wishing for dead
A planned death, as soon as he left the whores bed
He wanted to feel within her soul, metaphorically speaking
This was his chance for a show, historically seeking
Feelings once felt disappear with a knife in her back
A cold blooded monster now, with a soul turned to black
The ripper reborn, with a frail mind, feeble and torn
Just another day, no regrets once a steeple was formed
He can go there and kneel, and all of his sins repent
The priest stares down, sensing nothing but resent
But he walks away free, she put up such a weak fight
Only witnesses that night, were the moths in the street light[/font]
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Post by Arvincible »

I can say this could have a personal connection, but Im not gonna get into that....

The piece was dope, came real nice on the flow, the delivery and the emotion...
Descriptive Imagery is great as always. This one is my favorite piece from u fam.

9.789/10, I know u can kick it up another notch...

Good shit
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Post by Momeijah »

u Killed This. u Could've Just Told The Story Simply But This Had Great Use Of Similies, imagery And General Storytelling Elements. it Was Like i Was Watching it Happen, And What's Better is Although it Was PACKED With Descriptions u Didn't Over-indulge And Cause Me To Lose Grip Of What Was Actually Happening. Definitely Definitely DEFINITELY Want To See More Like This, And Longer Ones Too. You've Elevated So Much in a Short Time And im Looking Forward To Seeing What u Can Do in The Future. i Don't Normally Leave 100% Positive Feed But i Gtta Give Credit Where it's Due, Glad i Read This.
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Post by Omega Bill »

Thanks guys. It's appreciated.
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Post by Khan »

yo drop part two is all i have to say..lmao very nice.
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Uppin for feed.
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Post by - Mutual - »

yeah this was the shit
the imagery and flow gave it a great script
the sort of shit i wish to do
and this standard if i ever do it i'll be happy with myself
it might not be great to some but to me yeah
great stuff keep'em comin Bill
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by Omega Bill »

Seein what some of the new guys think of this.

Might make a part 2.
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

hm never seen this, dunno but it seemed overrated, it was good tho, not just a bunch of senseless rhyming, could've been better 7/10, decent drop
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Post by - Mutual - »

i know no offence but i must off been in this sorta mood when i first read this cus now i'm not feelin it as much lol
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by TreTru »

I'm into the Topical shit so I'm feelin this..
good imagery..


quote..
Feelings once felt disappear with a knife in her back
A cold blooded monster now, with a soul turned to black
The ripper reborn, with a frail mind, feeble and torn
Just another day, no regrets once a steeple was formed




I was diggin these lines most..tight
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