Throw Them Shots Back At Em

Dead Silence · Post by **Dead Silence** » Sat Oct 25, 2008 10:51 am

just a song i did recently

NOTE:
no one is dissed in this accept Young J (some local dood) and VIP

diggin myself a real deep grave//
im comin back for motherfuckers twice my age//
try to overthrow the king im out of sight//
underground purple kush thats outta site//
hevens my home earths my vacation spot//
comin back once again to prove whats hot//
to certifie the rel gangbagers and the rel street thugz//
if u fucked wit this your gonna get hugged//
surrounded by the white sheetz the devils outfit//
aint loose on tight beats i cant doubt it//
young j productions aint fuckin wit my label//
keep on fuckin up and ill leave u disable//
make you paralyzed from the waste down//
one week later his bodie was drowned//
ill leave u flyin wit the fishes//
and swimmin with the bitches//

ne thing u say will bounce off onto you//
piercing ur skin like a bullet from a .22//
itll leave a whole to show all of ur sins//
how can u compete to me when u dont have any wins?//
call me the Rubbermaid man the way i stack dough//
ill leave u hanging want just so u want mo//
dont you dare test me im gods curse//
it can cause you to leave in a fuckin black hurst//
the boi says Rockys good with AME//
but he says fuck em and says to them "AIM AT ME"//
im crazier than that dood named viral//
shittin out bananas that form a spirl//
look into my eyes and see Dominos//
stringin my gutair next to my dimond flows//
not fuckin wit cats who have complexity//
got faggots like VIP tryin to sit next to me//

Kurse · Post by **Kurse** » Sat Oct 25, 2008 12:41 pm

That last bar had me rollin hahaha
Good to see you applying name-play to ur shit...
...was also suprised about the last bar cuz the last person you've took shots at on illest was Big P. So it's interesting to see shots fired between other audio artists here on illest.
Not big on the Weezy sample, beat was so/so...
...but not to shabby. Your definately learning on how to ride the beat a little better than you were a year ago.

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Sat Oct 25, 2008 2:01 pm

Yo Real Talk..
For Some Reason i get The Impression Ur Tryna Sound Like Lil Wayne
If So.. Lmao Please Stop It Now...
Flow Wus Choppy...Deff.. Better Then Ur Otha Shit..
More Emotion Please.. Less Of The Gun Talk Bullshit Have Some Orginality...
Beat wus Aiight... Da Wayne Sample Wus Koo..
U gotta Loosen Up N Let Shit Come Naturally U Sound Like U Needa Take a shit Badly In Da Second Verse..

Anyways Keep Up Wid Elevation No Hate..

B E Z.

HKX · Post by **HKX** » Sat Oct 25, 2008 3:24 pm

shit was decent dawg not bad keep ridin da beat nigga lil wayne is garbage nigga need 2 change ur shit in my opinion but overall da track was aight not bad keep droppin son lol

Dead Silence · Post by **Dead Silence** » Sun Oct 26, 2008 4:51 am

thanks for the advice.

attn:TGYH
with that fish thing was just some w.e kinda shit
switching it up
and its ur opinion and i respect what u said. not everyone is gonna see the ups in improvement and i respect that

Hazard:
nah. im not trying to sound like lil wayne. i dk if its coz i listen to him on a daily basis and it just comes out when i rap or w.e
but in no way im trying to sound like him. but u and a few other people seem to think that. so i kinda take that as a compliment

-TraMaTiK- · Post by **-TraMaTiK-** » Sun Oct 26, 2008 5:40 am

i hate wayne lol so i didnt like the sample but the beat was kool..

um..ok..idk if its ur mic or ur gettin alotta feedback or what it is but ur words sound meshed n slurred..ur first verse was ok for riding the beat..but it seems like u havent found a main topic inside ur verses,u switch it up a bit ya kno

"to certifie the rel gangbagers and the rel street thugz
if u fucked wit this your gonna get hugged "

gonna get hugged?..come on now man this isnt barney dawg fuck that shit.

then u go on to say somethin about ur gods curse in the 2nd one and shit then mentioning AME..?Ok uhh why did u mention them?? no hate but u shudnt. u went from 'killin someone to AME' u see the major difference? its confusing and not tolerable..ur elevating a lil bit ur stayin on beat more,not fully yet tho..in all honesty lets be real,'gangsta rappin' isnt for u homie. i admire ur confidence but i dont think this is ur kinda music..i dont think it suits u really man. try brain-storming alotta diff ideas,nothing to do with guns,ur gonna ride n die with gang bangaz and all that stupid shit cuz WE ALL KNOW u arent. be creative as i think haz said above me..all in all man dont take it as hate,i was in ur position too,i cudnt really ride a beat i had trouble with the topics and the list goes on..i kno where ur comin from..but aye! its been a while since then for me and im doin alot better then i was, i hope to see u in that position..if u feel u can do it,practice ur ass off on ur next song and prove to us u got what it takes to step out side of the box ya kno?..nobody can help u elevate but urself. ya everyone can give u specific details on how to practice this n that but we all got out own ways..find what works best for u dawg. im not sayin u dont have the potential cuz everyone does,its just a matter of findin that potential within urself and using it with ORIGINALITY. with that said ill be checkin for ya next drop..i dont expect u to go 'gold over night' so to speak..but i hope i hear something changin man,keep writin.

Young K · Post by **Young K** » Sun Oct 26, 2008 6:34 am

your elevating in my opinion...
heard this beat awhile ago, but it's kool...
flow is sloppy, but it got a lot better since the last time i heard your music...
lyrics are decent, not much to say about'em...
ok track overall, you need more swag though if your gonna pull this type of track off, but keep doing you homie...

precise · Post by **precise** » Sun Oct 26, 2008 7:41 am

better than ur last one, but i dont really think this style fits u, just keep spittin ull figure out it eventually dude

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Sun Oct 26, 2008 1:58 pm

No its horrible U Dont Sound Like Um u Sound Like u Tryna Sound Like um

Dead Silence · Post by **Dead Silence** » Mon Oct 27, 2008 2:43 am

Tram.
yeah i see where ur comin from.
the topic of it i was trying to get across was kinda how people throw hatred words towards me and i throw em back at em. hence the title. i wasnt specifically saying that but thats what i was trying to get across. and personally. i think my beat riding skills were the same but a tad bit dif. not enough for anyone to REALLLY see a change in it. but ive been going thru my old tracks and trying to re record them to make it better. thats what i did with this one. i never released it because i only had the 1st verse done. so i just worked on it. so like i did with many other of my tracks. i might go back and re record this to see how it goes

but i see where everyone is comin from
so imma try to do the best kinda song i know how to do. and R AND B kinda thing. kinda like "Reality Check" but softer.
so keep an eye out for that

but thanks for the advice and feedback really appreciate it.

Cee4 · Post by **Cee4** » Mon Oct 27, 2008 4:36 am

i hate Lil Wayne but i liked the sample for some reason. The beat was cool. Flow wise u are elevating. u defenitly rode the beat well. Lyrical content im not so sure. U been doing this a while and in my opinion if u were gonna be any good lyrically it should have already happened. then again i could be wrong. just my opinion

Dead Silence · Post by **Dead Silence** » Mon Oct 27, 2008 9:25 am

yeah.

if anyone wants my opinion
my lyrics have improved a little bit from my earlier shit

but my flow isnt what i want it to be

with my lyrics i was trying some word and name play shit at the end.just to see how i could do it.

i also had them to see ur guys' reaction to it

but thanks cee4

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