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...This Is Why Im Hot

Post by ScottJames »

Ummmmmmmmmm......
First Off Im ILL, I Will Be RIPPIN-THE-PAGES Im Still At It So Hate It..
Ya WISDOM-IS-TASTELESS So Fuck Wit Me An I'll "Rip Ya Bars Apart" Like A "PRISON-ESCAPEST"!!!
Have Ya KISSIN-THE-PAVEMENT, Ya MISSIN-YA-FACE-KID!! Look I Got EXPLOSIVE-TACTICS..
Im Baddest!! So I'll "Blow All Ya SENSE On The Table" Like "POKER-ADDICTS"!!!
In Fact Which I HOPE-FOR-HAVOC, Fuck HOLDIN-MATICS Im Tragic, Yet SO-DRAMATIC..
Ill Make Ya Dissappear When I SHOW-SOME-MAGIC, Have Ya "See Death" Like An "OPEN-CASKET"!!!
My FLOW-IS-CRACK-KID!! Yall Just BLATANT-NONSENSE Im Rockin AMAZING-DROPS-BITCH...
I FLEX-BLADES-TO-CHOP-SHIT, My Text Wont Jus "Mind-Fuck" U, Itll "IMPREGNATE-YA-CONSCIENCE"!!!
Ya DEAD-WEIGHT-SO-STOP-IT!! Ill "Beatchu Till Ya Holy" Like "DRUMMERS-AT-WORK..
Im Crack Like PLUMBERS-AT-WORK!! Cheat Me? Please G, That Shit "Dont Slide" Like "RUNNERS-AT-FIRST"
PUNCHIN-U-HERBS.. Queer. U Stay At The End Like ALL-MY-CLOSERS Fuck All U ON-LINE-POSERS..
Ya GOT-9-TOASTERZ?? Who Da Fuck Cares!! Yall Faggots Jus "Two-Faced" Like The "SAW-5-POSTER"!!!
Yall At The Bottom Like Coasters!! So I Finna BREAK-YA-REP TAKE-ONE-STEP? Better PRAY-FOR-DEATH...
Ill SLAY-YA-TEXT Cuz HEY!-I'M-BEST So Believe All My "Shots On Point" Like A "BAYONET"!!!
Spit BLADES-THAT-WRECK!! Ya Shakin Cuz Like A "Bad Doctor" Im "LOOSIN-MY-PATIENCE"...
Im MAKING-ARRANGEMENTS To Leave Ya "Down An Out" Like Yall Was "ESCAPING-THROUGH-BASEMENTS"!!!
Have Ya DATING-THE-PAVEMENT.. BUST-SCOTT?-I-DARE-YA I MUST-STOP-YA-ERA...
But Yo... Im "So Sick" That Ill Leave Yall "Palin-The-Face" Like A "MUG-SHOT-OF-SARAH"!!!!


Uh Huh!
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My FLOW-IS-CRACK-KID!! Yall Just BLATANT-NONSENSE Im Rockin AMAZING-DROPS-BITCH...
I FLEX-BLADES-TO-CHOP-SHIT, My Text Wont Jus "Mind-Fuck" U, Itll "IMPREGNATE-YA-CONSCIENCE"!!!



9/10


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Post by precise »

"Rip Ya Bars Apart" Like A "PRISON-ESCAPEST" <--- not bad dude
Im Crack Like PLUMBERS-AT-WORK<-- lmao
"Shots On Point" Like A "BAYONET"<-- lol good concept
Leave Ya "Down An Out" Like Yall Was "ESCAPING-THROUGH-BASEMENTS<-- dayum!
"Palin-The-Face" Like A "MUG-SHOT-OF-SARAH<-- hahaha nice


i liked this alot dude, aside from a few forced multies n a couple punches that were playd(coaster line n doctor line), overall it was sick as hell, lotsa nice original punchlines n a good flow,

it was a good read, with a lame title lmao
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Post by Kurse »

Ain't gonna front...this shit was fiya! haha

Wayyyyyy too many quotables to just select one or two! Shit was just that nice...one of the better drops with a strong swagger and presence that I've read here in a while.
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Post by ScottJames »

eh yall, i realy appreciate the feed!!! much respect to those who comment on this drop!!!

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"My FLOW-IS-CRACK-KID!! Yall Just BLATANT-NONSENSE Im Rockin AMAZING-DROPS-BITCH...
I FLEX-BLADES-TO-CHOP-SHIT, My Text Wont Jus "Mind-Fuck" U, Itll "IMPREGNATE-YA-CONSCIENCE"!!! "

Well done man.
Very dope bar. I like your drop. It flowed really well and had some good imagery. Keep it up.
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Post by MagicMark »

yeah man, my style of piece

cool concepts, hot punches.. some a lil simple, but most on point..

runners, sarah and basement where my fav's

good job man..
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Post by Miilz »

Yeah This Was Kinda Sick, id Rate it Like 8/10. More Entertaining Then Most Of The Scriptures i Read, But Overall it Was A Good Drop Though.
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Post by The Gonz »

Shit was nice, no doubt. I was a little disappointed that you used "Pavement" twice in one verse, but the punches made up for it. Definitely got some nice metaphors and similies.
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Post by ScottJames »

preciate the feed yall..
whys that bad that i used "pavement" twice?
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Ekmos - KO ... Duc3 - KO ... Jesodist - KO ... MagicMark - KO ... Animul_Instinkz - KO ... Old Rotten - KO ... Dr Kevorkian - KO ... Ambition - KO ... Eclipse - KO ... Domino - 5-3 ... Crimson - KO ... MC Scars - KO ... Modern Defiance - KO ... Tempest - KO ... QwarterZ - KO ... TreTru - KO ... Quix - KO ... Grim/Leeroi Green - KO ... Knowmad - KO ... Cre@tiv3 - KO ... MVario - TKO ... Hazard - KO ... ER - KO ... Colossus - KO ... FlipSide - KO ... JackDaRippa - KO ... JSteel - KO ... Kau The Lion - KO ... 32Neilz - KO ... Evolution - TKO ... Shazo - KO ... CBK - KO
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Post by Mac »

Word, Well Done Homie. Other then The Shit That Was Forced, This Was A Pretty Raw Verse. Your Punches Were On Point, The Flow Was There. Over All This Was Hott.

By The Way, It Don't Matter That You Used Pavement Twice. lol

Good Shit, Keep Droppin.
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Post by The Gonz »

It does matter. Means you ran out of shit to work with and went back to a similar rhyme scheme.
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If You Say So.....
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Post by Cee4 »

its maybe a slight mark off coz dating the pavement and kissin the pavement is a bit of a repetitive theme. but its at opposite ends of the verse and i wouldnt of noticed it if it hadnt been pointed out. dosent really matter lol

anyway the verse was fire. flowed nice and had some dope punches. props
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Re: ...This Is Why Im Hot

Post by complexity »

Ummmmmmmmmm......
First Off Im ILL, I Will Be RIPPIN-THE-PAGES Im Still At It So Hate It..
Ya WISDOM-IS-TASTELESS So Fuck Wit Me An I'll "Rip Ya Bars Apart" Like A "PRISON-ESCAPEST"!!!

^the wording was decent, played punch

Have Ya KISSIN-THE-PAVEMENT, Ya MISSIN-YA-FACE-KID!! Look I Got EXPLOSIVE-TACTICS..
Im Baddest!! So I'll "Blow All Ya SENSE On The Table" Like "POKER-ADDICTS"!!!

^nice

In Fact Which I HOPE-FOR-HAVOC, Fuck HOLDIN-MATICS Im Tragic, Yet SO-DRAMATIC..
Ill Make Ya Dissappear When I SHOW-SOME-MAGIC, Have Ya "See Death" Like An "OPEN-CASKET"!!!

^alright, I don't mind that

My FLOW-IS-CRACK-KID!! Yall Just BLATANT-NONSENSE Im Rockin AMAZING-DROPS-BITCH...
I FLEX-BLADES-TO-CHOP-SHIT, My Text Wont Jus "Mind-Fuck" U, Itll "IMPREGNATE-YA-CONSCIENCE"!!!

^haha

Ya DEAD-WEIGHT-SO-STOP-IT!! Ill "Beatchu Till Ya Holy" Like "DRUMMERS-AT-WORK..
Im Crack Like PLUMBERS-AT-WORK!! Cheat Me? Please G, That Shit "Dont Slide" Like "RUNNERS-AT-FIRST"

^nah

PUNCHIN-U-HERBS.. Queer. U Stay At The End Like ALL-MY-CLOSERS Fuck All U ON-LINE-POSERS..
Ya GOT-9-TOASTERZ?? Who Da Fuck Cares!! Yall Faggots Jus "Two-Faced" Like The "SAW-5-POSTER"!!!

^i haven't seen the saw 5 poster

Yall At The Bottom Like Coasters!! So I Finna BREAK-YA-REP TAKE-ONE-STEP? Better PRAY-FOR-DEATH...
Ill SLAY-YA-TEXT Cuz HEY!-I'M-BEST So Believe All My "Shots On Point" Like A "BAYONET"!!!

^o.O, excellent

Spit BLADES-THAT-WRECK!! Ya Shakin Cuz Like A "Bad Doctor" Im "LOOSIN-MY-PATIENCE"...
Im MAKING-ARRANGEMENTS To Leave Ya "Down An Out" Like Yall Was "ESCAPING-THROUGH-BASEMENTS"!!!

^nah

Have Ya DATING-THE-PAVEMENT.. BUST-SCOTT?-I-DARE-YA I MUST-STOP-YA-ERA...
But Yo... Im "So Sick" That Ill Leave Yall "Palin-The-Face" Like A "MUG-SHOT-OF-SARAH"!!!!

^nah

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Your first post interested me so much, I wanted to come back and see what else you had. Another action packed punchline drop. I'd give it a 8.8/10.
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