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Mass Effex · Post by **Mass Effex** » Wed Oct 22, 2008 10:35 pm

haha. It kept my hooked in, I like the word choice, and I could really feel the emotion from your words. I like how you ended it too.

ÐÛÇ£» · Post by **ÐÛÇ£»** » Wed Oct 22, 2008 11:20 pm

Lmao @ you being on some o.j shit

Miilz · Post by **Miilz** » Wed Oct 22, 2008 11:29 pm

Lmfao

It Caught My Eye, This Wasn't Bad. You Kept The Story Line Good The Flow Was Nice. i Found it Entertaining, Also i Get Where You're Coming From When You Talking About These Hoes. Anyways This Was A Tight Drop. This The Thing, i Usually Get Bored Reading Topical Text, But You Seem To Always Catch My Attention In Each Drop.

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Wed Oct 22, 2008 11:47 pm

Deff.. a Emotional Piece.. Reminds ME OF Some EMinem Type Shit..
RHymes was There.. But The Actual Feelings N Emotion Could Be Felt..
The Realness is There , Unlike Half The Scripts people Post Where it Could Be
"Sad" but 'No Emotion Comes off...

I Respect How u Can Air ya SHit Out.. Writings Theraputic...
For How Short This Was And The Topic's Consistency i'd Give it a 8/10

Kurse · Post by **Kurse** » Thu Oct 23, 2008 5:41 am

That's dat shit kid, haha...I know how all that goes mayne. Granted I dislike the government's "push to shove" tactics worse when it comes to protecting the BM's...but I know where ur at wit it when it comes to the emotion and the train-of-thought in this matter.
Very nice.

precise · Post by **precise** » Thu Oct 23, 2008 8:43 am

lmaoooooo

"if i could go back id be sure to beat and rape you"
sincerely yours im glad u know i hate u

^^^^damn that endin was hilarious dude, i liked the style, short n to the point, werent really any impressive rhymes but it did flowe better because of it. good shit

also, comin from the dude that wrote "10 reasons why OJ is my hero" makes the shit even better hahaha

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Thu Oct 23, 2008 11:45 am

Yo.
Feed My New Drop U Bastard
LOL

Glamtrash · Post by **Glamtrash** » Thu Oct 23, 2008 11:47 am

hahaha I like it. Anything fueled by hate and passion makes for a good piece. Killer endin too.

9/10

|.R.SON.aLL.| · Post by **|.R.SON.aLL.|** » Sat Oct 25, 2008 8:07 pm

Lmao This Shit Was Koo ..
Loved Tha Opener ..
Shit Was Fresh to Me ..
I Tend to Love Weird Shit ..

Cee4 · Post by **Cee4** » Mon Oct 27, 2008 4:22 am

damn this was on some real shit. like ya needed to vent. the whole thing hit hard. the closer was obviously the highlight. shock tactics grab the readers attention and you expressed your emotion well. 8/10

Def-init · Post by **Def-init** » Mon Oct 27, 2008 4:53 am

Nice Hate. I can relate to this drop big time.
Nice closer lol

"You Called Tha Police i Was Kicked Outta My Own Crib
i Wish i Hadda Life Ta Live i Was Kicked Outta My Own Kids "

Deep n dope bro. My fav line in your drop.

Arvincible · Post by **Arvincible** » Mon Oct 27, 2008 4:02 pm

this piece was real nice fam...i loved the tone u set and the syntax couldnt have been better--crisp and simple to the point.

9/10 man for a key this was lovely lol

HKX · Post by **HKX** » Wed Oct 29, 2008 7:29 am

nice drop nigga gots emotion in it and everythin dat goes wit it wanna see more of dis shit when u drop sumthin else keep droppin 1

precise · Post by **precise** » Thu Nov 06, 2008 11:36 am

5 reasons why TOYH is my hero:

1- he wrote 10 reasons why OJ is his hero (in fightclub)
2- afterwards, he wrote a scripture called "decieving bitch" lmaooooo
3- hes comfortable enuff with his sexuality to use pink text.. (he doesnt care if we all know hes gay)
4- juice-zilla, nuff said hahaha
5- ive always hated heros (ThaOneYouHate)

hahahaha

Mac · Post by **Mac** » Sat Nov 08, 2008 12:32 am

Dope Ish, This Just Goes To Prove Once Again That If You Flow About Real Shit It Comes Out More Natural. This Verse Was Fresh, The Opener Was Bananas An The Ending was Raw. It Sucks It Was So Short Though, You Outta "remix" It and Make It Longer, I'd Like To See More...

This Was Definately A Elevated Verse From You From What I've Read In The Past.

Stay At It Man.

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