When Thugz Cry

[El Original]

http://www.www.illestlyrics.com/copyrig ... 0d830abf4/

El Original, Yung Flo & Bizzy Bone

Im first flow is second verse, bizzy last but not least

[Kurse]

Well I guess I don't need to leave Bizzy any feed...I'm sure dat nigga already knows that he's good. lol

Anyways, first off lemme say welcome to illest...hope to see you drop more audio, or text, or both during your stay here. As you can see...our Creation Chamber has nearly 500 drops in it, with thousands of donwloads and even more views...so it stays active and we'll all try to be generous on the feed as time permits us.

As for your track. Not too shabby. I'll tell you what I liked the most about it. The spanglish! Nobody other emcee other than my nigga HKX (another artist here on illest and my labelmate) has dropped spanglish lyrics besides him and you (and sometimes me). So it was definately good to hear someone exercising that type of style. I could be wrong, but you sound like your from Cali. You seem to have alot of Cali influence in what you spit.

Lyrically not bad, could've used a lil more complexity but it was still a solid verse. Lacking a bit in quality. Sounds like you might need a better mic. But it wasn't unbearable, atleast I was able to understand you. Good energy when you spit as well!

Young Flow seems to lack in the energy department a little, he needs to work on presence because he gives off the impression that he's reading off of the paper. Which is fine if he does...but the key is to NOT let the listener pick up on that! lol Lyrics were real basic, quality about the same.

Not a bad drop though. I'll give it a 7/10

Like to hear more from ya! Keep droppin mayne.

[drunken jesus]

deliverys a lil monotone, personally i think it'd sound better if you rapped faster over this, lyrics aren't bad, nothing jaw dropping nothing bad

second guy sounds much more amateur, his deliverys real weak, & his flow is really bad, lyrics aren't bad but overall he needs alotta work

bizzy's verse was dope

[HKX]

heard dis shit earlier 2day, shit was nice not bad of a drop 1st verse was decent but I didn't feel no emotion in it tho I look 4 emotion when it comes 2 a verse than I listen 2 wordplay and methaphors, etc. 2nd verse was a lil better than da 1st could've been a lil better wit more emotion u were jus missin on blazin da mic dats all. I give dis a 6/10 doesn't mean i think its whack i jus think it could've been better feel me, every emcee has wat it takes 2 be a great one ya'll jus gotta work on ur shit and record and record da more tracks u record you'll understand wat I'm talkin bout I had dat problem when I was like 12 its like playin a game u jus get better at it over time, keep droppin niggaz and welcome 2 Illest

[El Original]

alright thanks for the feed yall apreciate it, i found out a way to record better and next time ill try to sound more emotion