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Post by Viral »

this was a really short track..but in my opinion one of ur best...the mixing could use some help..but otherwise the lyrics were dope n u rode the beat pretty well...keep it up man
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Double.FL wrote:It's short and lacking a point yes, but the thing that annoys the shit out of me is the extreme overlapping in the voices. You've got lots of skill and nice pick with the 3 doors down beat, but I think you could do a lot better than this. Work on your mixing, write out a full track (preferably one that makes sense from beginning to end) , and try again.
i agree with some of this... yeah he should write out a full track... overlapping probably havin the same problem as i am just not turnin the under vocals down enuff... i think he did just fine on it... lyrics... i mean... theres some people out there that can write a story song... but sometimes i write what i feel... i write what i like... thats where Free styling comes into play.... even if he was reading pre writ shit while recording the song... i feel that if you have something to say then write it down... story line or not... half of the songs out there today don't have story lines... and u can get creative with story lines but sometimes they get boring... and stayin on the same topic is kinda dull at times too... thats my point of view on it... take it how ya want tho...
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Post by Glamtrash »

-.HaZarD.- wrote:Double..
The Overlappin
Is Cause Plex also posted the track you Have To Pause that One
Haha he's right, I'm retarded. So, I still think you should make it longer and make it make sense, and I think you should definitely drop more.
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Post by Young K »

appreciate all the feed
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