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Yea ...

I Turn Rappas Ta Piff...U Yappas a Git... Broken...Twisted..N..Smoked...
Choken...Wristliss..N..Soaked..In ya Own RED STREAM....I'm Like a FED TEAM
How I KICK IN YA DOOR..Steal Ya Shit Then Put My DICK IN YA WHORE....
YOU KNOW I'm Betta Then WHO FLOW Still Ain Labeled UNO...Ya CREWS SO...
NOT-SICK.. What CRACK YA PITCHIN? This RAPPAZ ITCHIN Like i GOT-TICKS...
Ta FLAIR-THESE-PAWNZ,Put u Unda Holdin Hands Thats "BERRY BONDS..."
I Got The RIGHT TA SKIN, ya Win PIPES N PIN..Them Up..So U Can't Breathe
The SLIGHEST WIN!..Wanna Battle i LIKE TA WIN..'i'll Take ONE A DAY'
Like Poppin "VITAMINZ!"..I'm OUT TA GUN Any Rappa While Dat MOUTH YA RUN..
How U a NICER MICER u Can't 'PULL DAT SHIT!' Like ya Thoughts ABOUT A GUN...
Who Eva I'm TORCHINS FINISHED..Eatin Um Like PORTIONED SPINICH.....
Of COURSE-IN-MINUTES...i'll Kill These Kids Like ABORTION CLINICS....
Lyrically I'ma DIE HOW? Yall Flakey Niggas i'll Have You GUYS PLOWED...
Ya Lyrics Suck..Yet Doods 'Stringin u Along' Like Usin Thread Fa EYE BROWS!...
I'm Quick Ta End Ya LIKE CRABS! With a LIGHT JAB..I'll Have ya "PACK LINED UP"
Like TIGHT-ABS!...
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

hm, kinda simple, not sure if u keystyled this cuz it seemed like it, mostly fillers, the flow was choppy, didn't catch any punchlines, or a message either, just seemed effortless and forced, no hate just tellin how it is, i dont expect a lot from u but i did expect more than this is wat im sayin
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Post by ScottJames »

dude, this was a weaker drop than what i have read from u,..
simple wordplay, soft punches..
flow was too choppy IMO..

With a LIGHT JAB..I'll Have ya "PACK LINED UP"
Like TIGHT-ABS!...

that was koo...^^
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Post by Haz »

On some Shit i Feel Like Smackin da Shit out This nigga...
Shut Up Already ... Ekoms... Suck a Dick... I Don't Need None of ya Hate Feed..
Thanks 4 The Feed Scott .. It Was a Keystyle To Get Rid Of Writers Block
Simple And Plain...
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

lmao, wow.. i was actually being nice about it, take it how u want tho, i assumed it was a keystyle.. cuz if it wasn't then u sure as hell need more practice then i thought..don't know how u could've expected anything good to come out of that indirect useless excuse for a verse, don't be salty cuz the truth hurts kid
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Post by Jesodist »

Hazard why you gotta act all bitchy about people's feedback on your rap ?
isnt that the reason you posted your raps?

Anyways nice key style and Ekoms not all raps will have punches you always talking about punches some rappers focus oin multies with a lil punch in ther too. I really dont think punches take a lotta work to do while multies are just the shit.
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Post by Haz »

Na Jes. Notice i Thanked Scott,
It's that This guy's a Hater Thats all Thanks for The Feed
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Post by Haz »

Feed...
Hmmm Where to Start...

The Punches Seemed to simple Like you Didn't put Alot of Thought into Them,
Wordplay was Here And there Nothing Special Though... The Flow Was Aiight Could of Been Written Better... Multis Were Coo.. Alot Of Fillers Here & There.
Concepts Didn't Seem To Be Well Thought Out , Few played Out Ones.. & Few That Didn't Connect... Seen Alot Better From you...

Last Line Was probalay The Best one, Anyways

Better Luck Next Time
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

right right, and jesodist punches r the last thing i focus on, multis r the first, and i move on from category to category in my liking, yea there were multis..maybe one punch or two, punches take wits, multis do not, multis r the easiest imo, but n e ways i dont have a reason to hate, ur the only fuckbag who still thinks i do just cuz i dont like ur ass, great analogy
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Post by Glamtrash »

Not your best, but I've read worse.
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