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TreTru: "just a quikie I wrote for da haters"

Post by Ambiguous Realm »

THIS IS TRETRU'S DROP

"wanna rap about me go head and rap about me
pushin yo shyt, like a gay dikc, in your anatomy
got these no timer rhymers advertising with blasphemy
actin like rappin captains their awards academy..
the things they got in common, are azzholes and opinions
I steer queers twisted ideals clear like rack and pinions..
and they can keep marchin through the darkness with all their minions
hiding their painted faces trying to blend in like chameleons...
but I dont blam'em, for hatin of course they gotta lie..
who wouldn't wanna be on the grind and spit it like I..
I hear the envy and jealousy spoke in every line
maybe I aint never heard your tracks cause your too scared to try...
Now tell me why, when I aint never said a fake thing
these ni@@az got baked brains, mad at me cause they hate wayne..
You got issues , bout to get you, hit by a freighttrain
try and maintain yo mainframe, while I make change..
I feel you my haters if I was you I'd hate me too..
go to all your shows in the back of the crowd and scream out BOO!!
so keep it up my haters cause your bringin up my fame...
the best thing you'll ever say out yo mouth is my name...

I'm right here and when I'm not get me @
www.myspace.com/tretrumusic ..


my styles kinda trippy, me and my homie petrafyne do all our own shit (who doesnt nowadays?)
you might wanna listen to it to get my flo..peace"





tre next time make a new post like i just did.. and then post ur lyrics, dont post them in something that already exists
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Post by Glamtrash »

Sorry dude, but this is shit, I mean sure, it rhymes, but just because words rhyme doesn't make them work. Try telling a story through your words, it'll work out better for you. Nice try though, keep droppin.
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Post by TreTru »

I actually wrote this to a while ago and yeah it's not that great..
this though is droiven me crazy now that I re read it..

"You got issues , bout to get you, hit by a freighttrain
try and maintain yo mainframe, while I make change..
I feel you my haters if I was you I'd hate me too.."
that was a shitty transfer ...


whatever next time.
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Post by - Mutual - »

yeah we still hitin them cyphers Tre u do better in there
but i aint that good at scriptures my new script bout to go up
keep'em comin tho Tre jus gotta get ya mind straight
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by Jesodist »

It did rhyme just a lil complexed thats all. I hope i did'nt inspire part of that verse.
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Post by TreTru »

No it didn't I didn't take as much time for the end..whatever, next time..
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