Superstar (Failure part 2 ..)

[Brah-Vo]

He could hear the crowd now
All of em was gettin so loud now
The clicks of the cameras
the chicks with the memories
to every lyric he wrote
they would cheer when he spoke
the mic ensured they would hear when we spoke
Never dreamed of this
the fame, the big names and gettin rich
the scandalous bitch the planes and the fan trains
burn stains on his threads coz plain clothes is played
And anyway the label payed for it
Got a fancy foreign car which would hum when he floored it
after that get his fortune told coz he a taurus
Aint no problem writin verses but gets stuck on the chorus

And right there thats the game
Excited every day but his feelings was tamed
To his concert they be bringin the bongs
smiles on they face they be singin along

like la dee da dee da

But hes too tall to fall
Will do anythin so he aint gotta keep the raw
dont want the wrong ki/key to open the wrong door
All his hard work where did it get him before
Now he lookin off and awkward
The crowds waits and listens
Looks in the front row but his Moms is missin
Gets hyped, gets energised
The pressures on but guess who aint gonna crack
As the curtains open and he performs his new ghostwritten track

[TreTru]

that was dope..well written sounds like chi-town style flo..
concept was good and lyricism ..solid.

[Brah-Vo]

GOod Looks on the feed my dude!

[Brah-Vo]

upping

[EvilJoey]

Yea over all Solid piece.. good flow... Stayed on topic

Any Rhymes that i thought were a lil off would be fixed with just the pitch of ur voice. So thi sseem slike it would be areal good one to do Audio for sure.

Liked the ending too.

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[Lotus]

He could hear the crowd now
All of em was gettin so loud now
The clicks of the cameras
the chicks with the memories
to every lyric he wrote
they would cheer when he spoke
the mic ensured they would hear when we spoke
feelin these lines.... its profound.. i like how you put a dual meaning into a seemingly literal expression of "the mic ensured they would hear when he spoke"

Never dreamed of this
the fame, the big names and gettin rich
the scandalous bitch the planes and the fan trains
burn stains on his threads coz plain clothes is played
And anyway the label payed for it
Got a fancy foreign car which would hum when he floored it
after that get his fortune told coz he a taurus
Aint no problem writin verses but gets stuck on the chorus

And right there thats the game
Excited every day but his feelings was tamed
To his concert they be bringin the bongs
smiles on they face they be singin along

like la dee da dee da

But hes too tall to fall
again, can't put my finger on it, this simple line resonates well wit me though.

maybe cuz im 6'2" lol

Will do anythin so he aint gotta keep the raw
dont want the wrong ki/key to open the wrong door
All his hard work where did it get him before
i like the ki thing. kinda referencing to karmic retribution..
and i doubt many people would notice, or maybe im lookin into it too deeply, but i like the dual use of "hard work", referencing to the first line, "keep the raw".

Now he lookin off and awkward
The crowds waits and listens
Looks in the front row but his Moms is missin
Gets hyped, gets energised
The pressures on but guess who aint gonna crack
As the curtains open and he performs his new ghostwritten track

awesome man. very heartfelt. nice ending too

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[Brah-Vo]

Yo .. GoodLooks On the feed my dude!

[|.R.SON.aLL.|]

This Was Nice Fam ..
i Love Tha Lil Series U Got Goin` ..
i Liked Part One Better For Some Reason ..
But Props Tho ..

[Brah-Vo]

GoodLooks on the feed Rell .
Uppin