Till i Fall

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Wed Jan 10, 2007 10:44 am

lol When U Gun Get Da Point Dat I Honestly
Dont Care?....

drunken jesus · Post by **drunken jesus** » Wed Jan 10, 2007 11:06 am

well you seem to care when everybody tells you suck dick and you continue to argue with them like your feelings are hurt

if you don't care that you're not good at writing whats even the point of writing in the first place?

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Wed Jan 10, 2007 11:09 am

lol Dats Fa Me To Think About N u To Have No Clue
Im juz Doin me Dont Worry About it Aiight

Subsist · Post by **Subsist** » Wed Jan 10, 2007 2:04 pm

i tried analysing it
My Soul Keepz Thrivin Heat Alive In
Palms Eyes Wit Fears Of No Nope/
he keeps thriving for success and hes full of energy inside (hype) and his palms and eyes shiver when he reaches dead ends?

Status Sold Coke Enemiez ?Would Blow Jokez
Tried To Hang Me I Was Chillen Wit Grown Folks/
(now he flashes back to old times_
he used to sell coke and had alot of enemies , they used to make fun of him. he also got jumped when hanging around with the wrong people.

Started To Rise Wit Heart N Fire In Pride
I Was Independent So Tired Of Sides/
he got sick of the situation so he quit the whole gang business and started to try and achieve.

"Red" Or Dat "Sky" Moms Or Pops
red=blood??? and he could see his mom and dad in the sky (theyre dead)

Read Into My Mind Kept Chrome Fa Watch/
(another flashback into a crime he done with his gang) he stayed in the car to keep watch

Neva Foned Da Cops Runnin In Are Homes So Hot
Fam Get In A Cell Tryna Get Me Homez So Not/
he wasnt the one who snitched on them and wonders who, his friend call him for aid but he gets scared and ditches?

My Bones Dropp Wit Tissue Of Winnin
he feels light (adrenaline rush)
i Dont See Light Wit Tha Shit That im in Kid/
he feels hes in real deep shit (metaphor!)

if I Can Earse It Fa A Quick Minute
i'll Dissappear Till I Hit Finish/
if he can get rid of that light feeling and regain his concentration , he can manage escaping (dunno what tho im lost)

im sure im wrong with something

Subsist · Post by **Subsist** » Wed Jan 10, 2007 5:44 pm

so hazard how close was i?

MesaR · Post by **MesaR** » Wed Jan 10, 2007 10:08 pm

Yeah i agree The Half The Multis Dont Make Sense Try Using A More Simple Way Of approching your Flow And Multis Structure and Yeah You Should be Right...And you seem to Rhyme Words In The Middle Of Your Bars Thats all Well and good but your main focus is how to flow and present Multis so Try to Keep The Rhyming till The Last Words In your Bars....Keep ya head up i Hope i Helped Peace.

8th · Post by **8th** » Thu Jan 11, 2007 12:32 am

STOP REOPENING THIS.

IT WILL BE RE-OPENED WHEN HE PM'S ME A LINK.

Subsist · Post by **Subsist** » Thu Jan 11, 2007 1:03 am

8th he edited his first post and added a link...

drunken jesus · Post by **drunken jesus** » Thu Jan 11, 2007 1:52 am

8th · Post by **8th** » Thu Jan 11, 2007 5:10 am

sorry, i didnt notice.

and killah, i would spend less time making those images, and more time on trying to make your 'remixes' on beat.

Typeo · Post by **Typeo** » Thu Jan 11, 2007 5:55 am

awwww 8th must like this guys butt! so cute.

Subsist · Post by **Subsist** » Thu Jan 11, 2007 10:25 am

8th wrote:sorry, i didnt notice.

and killah, i would spend less time making those images, and more time on trying to make your 'remixes' on beat.

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