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A track I wrote a few months ago.. thought I'd give it a chance.. actually, it was called words of my chest, and it's partly a tribute to my parents and is suppose to represent my gratitude and development as a person, from being an immature kid to becomin an independent man - hope ya'll like it
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i got a lil trouble understanding you cause of your viking accent, but your delivery and flow have improved alot since i last heard you, good to see you still working on upping your game all you really need to work on is polishing up your clarity and you'll be set, it may be just me but it seems like your accent causes you to kinda slur words together a lil bit, i notice alotta non-english speaking europeons run into the same problem when they rap in english

a good exercise i use to do when i rapped double-time(twice as fast ex. twista bone thugs etc.) i'd start off rapping slow just landing on every snare then i'd start rapping steadily faster until i maxed out(the point where what i was saying could be understood with clarity in my ears) and i'd add like 5-10 seconds to my maxed out time and rap the verse in that amount of time, you could use that process in a similar way just by rapping slightly faster and slowing it down for the final cut cause if you can say things at a faster speed clearly it's alot easier saying them at your normal rapping tempo clearly
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
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Aiit.. thanks man.. i know my accent's a problem.. but there's like nothin i can really do about it, except moving to a english-speakin country... and when it comes to speed and clarity there's also a lot o improvement.. but i'm workin on it.. i know it aint an excuse, and it's not meant to be either, but i haven't really been rappin on tracks for more then like 5-6 months.. so all the advice/techniques to help me improve is very appreciated..
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just takes a bit of practice really it isn't the accent thats a problem its mainly just the clarity but if you wanna see an impressive change in accent peep hugh laurie from House in the show he speaks like a normal american dude but hes a british dude and talks with a heavy british accent in interviews and what not, but yeah the accent ain't a problem really if your words are clear
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
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Alright man, I see your point.. thanks! i'ma give it a try !
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