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im sick wit a twist, get hit wit a fist, suffocate from lung cancer n whipped wit a stick, i hit a hick wit a brick, came back wit a pale n milked cows wit his kids, got one kicked in da dick...enough of dis basic rhymin ill transform into a form of slime enter ur esophogus and make u fly foward in time, im climbin to da moutain top where the fountains hot, feelin like im ina pot bouncin like hot dogs, deres a heavy amount of clouds n smog, rainin acid againt my thoughts ive brought enough canisters to make a cure sought for, gainin respect and recognition is da only shit ive fought for, no deal or money, im eatin orange peels wit honey, its funny..till ur walkin out in a storm, searchin for a place to stay, steal some paste n hay..usin a trough n BBQ cleaner to brush ur teeth wit, get ur son a baseball from da park wit some twigs n branches to make a leaf mit, smokin dat reef shit to get ur days to pass faster, sneak into a cafe and play some math blaster, find a church n feel like u gotta say "may i take a bath master?" but u dont...no u wont, even tho its ur only hope to stay alive u got dis swayin pride, comes n goes like the days go by, u wake up to realize uve been dreamin ur cell phone ringin, pick it up say hello and its ur homie, get over here man we got a track for u to make deez critics start choking...ur joking?..nah weve been offered a deal if we can kill dis beat,for some reason u feel defeat, yet victory invigorates ur senses...u show up wit a verse dat makes ur boys pause wit disbelief, ur main man falls in his seat, n looks at u like ya jst walked on water, shakes ur hand n gives ya a hug, respondin wit now we knos thugs show love, ur signed now n remember da past.....never thinkin time could fly by so fast....ur same home boy is sittin next to ya laughin....sayin..dis track is like our breakthrough cept dis time i aint lackin..u look back..smile..n spark da blunt, begin to dial numbers n start da new emcee hunt...
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Post by complexity »

ha, this was tight, i love the story, and the metaphors, you did that shit quick to. The points you were making were pretty tight to like why you rap. And shit, i liked how it all came together. Nice job 9/10.
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Post by 16 Micz »

eh pretty dope, havent seen something from u in forever tho. its a 8/10 for me i think i have A.D.D or something but yea pretty dope
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