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Goes Around Comes Around feat Oph White

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first verse and hooks - JollyJay (me)
2nd verse - Oph White

http://www.myspace.com/jollyjayspits

id highly appreciate some feed here!
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damm i thougt this forum was nice with feed...
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Post by Lawgix »

damn this is a really laid back type of track man.... u did a real good job... real good job on the hook br0... oph white wasn't too bad... loved the lyrics man really... hard to find songs with that emcee type of beat... good job man

i'd rate it a 8/10 i liked it
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thanks man... uppin
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yeah man was tight pretty good rhymes from both delivery went well keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by HKX »

good shit kid track wasn't dat bad shit was nice u need 2 ante up on ur myspace friends tho lol add more niggaz so they could hear ur shit
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[font=Georgia]Damn...Honestly, Immah Be Real I Don't Like Uk Rappers 2 Much, But Im Deff Feelin' Dis Joint

Lyrics, Flow, & Da Hook Was All On Point

Yuh Boy Did His Thinq On Hea 2

Nyce Shit Fammo

Keep On Droppin'

Be Easy

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thanks man... uppin
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Post by JollyJay »

ups?
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Post by Onediversekid »

Duuude this shit was dooope, keep it coming. Your voice really lends itself well to rap, so don't stop.
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Post by JollyJay »

^good looks man... appreciate the listen.
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Post by Onediversekid »

Yeah man, if you ever wanna collab on a song.. give me a shout.. I'm always looking for new artists to work with.
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Post by Glamtrash »

Not bad dude, you've got potential. 7/10.
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Post by JollyJay »

^thanks, any more opinions?
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