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Bum's Life

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mama always tell me "go do ya chores"
tellin me to get all the clothes off my floor
she gotta problem wit the porno in my drawers,
say i sleep all day "bitch it's only quarter to four!"
i come home at night, but she won't open the door!
fuck it, home is a bore... so i roam cuz im poor...
maybe i should go n knock over some stores,
so i did it 3 times, but scored big on the fourth,
went to the dealership "i've never driven a porche!"
then i woke up... "shit life sucks, what am I livin it for?"
think my moms got high right before i was born...
thas why i never been sober before,
im a creature of instinct, i go where it's warm,
and if I did go to college, I'd sell O'z out my dorm.
cops don't knock on my door, they knock it down to the floor...
"haha we don't need warrants no more!"
shit i get stoned right before, i go into court..
im high enough, but im bout to do life, you know i need some more..
im twisted outta my mind, yall about to see a storm...
bout to see a tornado form...
it doesn't ask for shit, it jus takes by force...

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Post by The Gonz »

This was pretty ill. The rhyme scheme was well executed and the multies were hella good. I like the little story behind it and the bit of humor injected. Definitely a good post.
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Post by hazyvibes86 »

Dam thats a different type of flow. nice!
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Post by Lotus »

thnx man... the flow seems kinda off when reading it, but i wrote this as a song so... yeah lol
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