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I was just checkin out how it would come out if I just talked about a bunch of issues on my mind while rhyming them the best I can while staying on topic.

Iono let me know what you think, remember im not really goin for super smooth flowin.


[font=Verdana]im c0re, salutations n im here to deliver my lyrical evaluation
so if you all will exercise some patience id like to address some serious allegations

2day wrappers stay thinkin their nice wit hip hop left payin the price
n the simple r stayin enticed while the legends are hangin their mics

christ.. this is exactly how a genre can flip the script n turn on yah
wen you start lettin fake bitches in n start choosin burris's over obama's

Is our sound so hated that the straightest are underrated
and the lyrically castrated are left to be debated as the greatest

I hate it but enough about our woes now lets talk about our souls
how there blacker then them holes rockin a radioactive glow

we attack then we toll, the creed of greed, spirits of assumption
actin like the goal, is the need to feed when its really interfernce for our corruption

You know the function. deploy then occupy, destroy then repopulize
rejoice then democretize until every voice is monopolized

can we just stop the lies?

hope is flickering in the light in the chance that we stand together n fight
then the blindfold will yield to our might n we may finally have the real enemy in sight


But
unfortunately

it looks like hope's got no shot
like she a coke hot nose jock

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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

not bad, liked the diversity of it, course with diversity u sacrifice consistency but u kept both well balanced, ending was i dunno..somethin.. lol,

inner multis were decent as well, overall a fairly decent piece, keep droppin
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Post by - Mutual - »

yeah i liked this
had my sorta flow to this shit
sum real diversity like Koms said
i think it was pretty good
keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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