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Gutta
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On the Rise

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Protecting tight my essentials of life
From the mental I write, pen or pencil ignite
To help me send you through plights
No gun shots in my residential tonight
See I personify Tony Montana's rise
Never reaching for the stars, I look beyond the skies
Towards Mars, Some remain in denial of fate
Imma fly so far, that heaven seems miles away
Compiling statements, til my rhyme book is sacred
Relate with a prisoner of the state intertwined in a life full of hatred
And crime, I designated my mind, stay away from the lines
Of coke, even though I was never designed to hope
Just collect nickels and dimes, or get paid off the rhymes I wrote
Only asking for satisfaction, Im the man
Even if you looking past him, you can taste the passion I embrace
My actions send me upstate with no payps or distractions
Smiles on my mommas face when she laughing
Even though it's hard to ventilate in the place I adapt in
Slammed in a concrete labyrinth next stop a casket
Either get locked or blasted, that how we living in my faction
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Post by - Mutual - »

this was dope
the vocab was dope
with sum nice multies
inbetween rhymes n shit i liked
it hadda smooth flow an sum real feeling

Even if you looking past him, you can taste the passion I embrace
My actions send me upstate with no payps or distractions
Smiles on my mommas face when she laughing
Even though it's hard to ventilate in the place I adapt in
Slammed in a concrete labyrinth next stop a casket
Either get locked or blasted, that how we living in my faction

fav bit^
pretty dope stuff
i thought it was a great read
and is trying to work out why nobody has feeded this shiit
but anyway dope Gutta
keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

This Shit Was Nice ..
You Grew as a Writer So Much ..
It`s Amazin to Read ya Shit ..
U are Like a Street Poet ..
This Piece Was Nice From a Lyrically Point ..
But Emotion & Imagery ..
Was Beyond Dope to Me
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.. it`s S.a.W Bitches ..
.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

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Post by Gutta »

thanks for the feed, i tried to put some emotion to it like in do in drops

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