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keystylin with alarmin-dark forces coursin forward through my sharpened-heart breakin weapons disarmin-marks pitch aresenick harmin quick with martial-arts lift souls six fold into gods strict hold
with poisonous sharpened-darts im poised with this hardend-card from the hand-life-dealt-me, even dr.phil cant-quite-help-me, a cannable..carniverous...cringin, weildin mind moldin malice, commandin magical-malitious-minions, find stolen chalice, tucked under my tactical prolific submissions, to this rap board illest lyricals to fill his spiritful with killahs mear wit pulls then disappear quick in the sickest myrical//

got inspired and flowed somethin quick, didnt bother messin around with structure or anything, kinda got complicated in some parts, ah well, if ya catch all the hidden rhymes then ya do, if ya dont ya dont, peeeace
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I saw a few subliminal shots maybe. Yah. The verse was dope. And I enjoyed reading it. Nice shit. I want to see more! And better structure. Hahah 8.5/10
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thanks haha, how come no one but plex ever leaves feedback on my verses???? come onnnnnnnn you lazy assholes
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Well its kind of like , he said it all. It was amazing yeah i agree with better structure.
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