The Waiters

The Gonz · Post by **The Gonz** » Fri Jun 19, 2009 5:34 pm

I'm not a preacher but let my try for a second/
What's with all these people that have to lie for acceptance/
Do they thrive for attention or feel their way through the dark/
Not bright enough to see they really hate who they are/
Like I've said, people are so obsessed with thier image/
That they neglect and forget all the perfection within us/
Afraid of rejection so they think they need to shapeshift/
Make it up as they go, but the real them is being wasted/
Some day they'll learn as they wait for their turn/
For their dreams to come true, convinced its the way that its earned/
Gaze out to sea at all they're wanting to reach/
While I'm boarding my raft and pushing off of the beach/
Built with my dreams, it may appear as an ailment/
But my hope floats and I've got the perserverance to sail it/
Good things come if you wait, but I know a secret/
The greater things in life come to those that seek it/

Thanks for listening.

Arvincible · Post by **Arvincible** » Fri Jun 19, 2009 6:45 pm

Nice...

More poetic when it comes to the flow. Some lines have more meaning than others as some have more delivery, it balances out.
You're one talented fuck. Keep it up.

8/10

Momeijah · Post by **Momeijah** » Sat Jun 20, 2009 2:55 am

Couldn't Agree More with The Content, Especially The Last Bar. i Could Rant All Day About This Kinda Shit So Let Me Concentrate More On The Feedback. Once Again No Point in Mentioning Multis Or Flow, And The Way u Put Simple Thoughts And Feelings into Context is Another Of ur Strongest Points. Short Drop, But u Got ur Point Across, Keep it Up.

The Gonz · Post by **The Gonz** » Sat Jun 20, 2009 4:46 pm

Preciate the feedback fellas.

eMCee Havic · Post by **eMCee Havic** » Sun Jun 21, 2009 1:05 am

yeah this was deep homie, dug the message, and the last line wrapped it all up nicely. multis were fire. i thought it was falling off towards the middle but than you brought it right back nice drop homie

peace

The Gonz · Post by **The Gonz** » Tue Jun 23, 2009 6:02 am

I hear snoring... its been a minute lol.

$harky · Post by **$harky** » Sun Jun 28, 2009 4:46 am

Yeah this drop, like all your others I've read flowed beautifully
I dig what you said about the phonies, and I couldnt agree more.

"Do they thrive for attention or feel their way through the dark/
Not bright enough to see they really hate who they are/"

thats some serious shit right there, my favourite line

also like all da rest said, the last bar just tuned the mood.

EvilJoey · Post by **EvilJoey** » Mon Jun 29, 2009 4:41 am

id sware i had left some feed back on this a few min ago.. idk whats going on...

OK SICKness
flow is hella nice...
Keeping that flow while getting a point acrss is even better...
Some nice lines.. but hten Ending killed it for sure.

Arvincible · Post by **Arvincible** » Mon Jun 29, 2009 5:38 pm

check ur pm bitch haha

-MenaCe- · Post by **-MenaCe-** » Tue Jun 30, 2009 3:26 am

Nice Drop Man Im Feelin That...

good wordplay in there...

9/10

The Gonz · Post by **The Gonz** » Tue Jun 30, 2009 3:41 am

PM checked and responded, you cum guzzling skank.

- Mutual - · Post by **- Mutual -** » Wed Jul 01, 2009 4:07 am

nice flow here
maybe not the most complex
nice hidden meaning sorta shyt
not the nicest vocab
but fo some reason this is dope
i dunno what it is
it jus has it dope shyt mayne
keep'em comin

The Gonz · Post by **The Gonz** » Wed Jul 07, 2010 12:05 pm

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