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Def-init
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Kidnapped

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The playground, void of voice!
Abduction at night, the method of choice
an empty swing, loiters in the yard!
no sympathy, as the hand strikes hard
Her breath, her sight, bound as she fights.
Deprived of everything, during the dead of night
She used to play in the street,
made friends with the summer's heat.
The heart beats, like drums on concrete.
Cries for mercy, but he dragged her feet
a body bruised, full of fear
as eyes stream the tears,
her voice speaks of prayers
Her ear hears...'music of the spheres'
as she disappears down dark steep stairs.
Innocence lost, locked in a cage
A puppet he controls, stranded on stage.
Frustrating, is loss of salvation.
Suffocating in her sense of intimidation.
Taken away from all she knows!
While her sibling asks "Where did sister go?"
Straight to the grasp of a kidnapper!
This family is poor, so what about the ransom?
Our Kingdom for the family photo-album.
An hour glass ticks with Egyptian sands,
as the sex trade awaits her in foreign lands
Rescue attempts seem impossible
A nickel...more than enough for a few minutes with her
Parents with brave faces, face the reporters!
They searched the strip mines, searched the caves.
Even the abandoned farms and river ways.
Drained the lakes, combed the cemeteries
even attracted the attention of authorities!
Searched abandoned trailers,
Watched every terrifyingly true thriller
that grips you for clues and finally......
Put flowers and pink feathers on an empty tomb.
- If I can't bend Heaven, I shall move Hell. -
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Re: Kidnapped

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Ok 1st Of All The Flow Was All Over The Place And Ruined What i Think is a Brilliant Drop. Loved The Perspective u Used On This, Talking About Her Family Trying To Find Her And The Ransom Etc. The Metaphors Were Dope, Puppet One is a Little Played And The Drums On Concrete One Didn't Really Make Sense To Me. BUT, The Summer Heat, intimidation And Egyptian Sand Lines All Stood Out. Another Thing i Liked Was How u Set The Scene at 1st, Shit Was Pretty Eerie, And The End Bar Finished On The Same Note. Good Shit Keep it Up But Work On Filler And Flow.
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