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I know, I know, it's not that great of an audio as far as not having a mic and that its not clear but fuck it, i did it anyways and i have never done an audio drop anywhere here on illest...ever.

so give a dude props on steppin up to the plate lol and its acapella wooooh!! lol

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Ive had the lyrics up for a couple months now and i wanted to show you all how it sounded to me when i wrote it. hope you enjoy.

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heres the lyrics btw
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not bad 4 a noob.... haha jus fuckin' wit u but lyrics were good not bad since dis is ur 1st drop on da chamber I can't really say much on da emotion cuz I wasn't feelin it but then again its ur 1st drop. I'd like 2 see u re do it but wit more emotion on it think it would sound better. U started gettin' a lil hard towards da end haha which is good so u learnin'. But good drop Arv nice 2 see u in da chamber I've been tellin' u 2 drop sumthin 4 a min now. Oh one more thing fuck u smile on da camera in the end haha u prob was like yea my 1st drop lol.
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yeah man i'll agree with HKX man... like no emotion at all ur just spittin words but since its ur first its understandable... u may do better if a beat was on... cause then u could feel the beat n shit... iuno lyrically its dope except for that pizza line... didn't like that pun... newayz man good drop...
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i see what you're saying

but at the same time i aint tryna be all crying in the screen like wtf nigga im emo lol
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Arv, they been critizising me about this "emotion" thing too.. so it must be somethin' to it. I guess all emcees should go hard like they've been through hell and back.. but I actually felt your smooth delivery, like you don't give a fuck... may not work in street corner battle, but gels to a smooth type vibe setting. Your first drop in video form, I'm impressed to say the least (not that it means much).

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Arvincible wrote:i see what you're saying

but at the same time i aint tryna be all crying in the screen like wtf nigga im emo lol
Emotion like Jay Z, DMX, Beanie Sigel, I think that is what they are implying.
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emotion meaning if you talk about your fuckin cat dying u don't wanna sound like robotic like "oh holy shit my cat died" but on the other hand u don't wanna sound like a pussy n a cry baby bitch sayin "wwaaahhhh my pussy cat died!!!!"... the way i express emotion is i write it as if i was depressed... and thats how i spit it as if i was depressed... u know how u get like down in the dumps sometimes and you have that certain way of talkin? can't really explain it thru text but its just there... its like puttin urself into character for one song and then slippin out of it when ur done. similar to acting. so if ur spittin sad shit sound depressed, if ur spittin mad shit sound fuckin mad, if ur spittin bout smokin weed man go smoke some weed come back and spit it haha... newayz thats what i'm talkin about with emotion
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lyrics are good....lol beat is mad i may say
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Lyrics were tight, your text battles would be tight, but like HKX and lawgix was saying, you gotta be feelings what you spitting man.. any1 can write a line its how you deliver that rhyme that makes you memorable or not, Lawgix git it on the head when it comes to emotions, but its also what type of beat you use, cuz speaking just for me. When you listen to a beat you can instantly know what type of emotion you need for the lyrics you trying to spit.. but for your first drop it was tight..
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Re: Green Eyed

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dawg. dope. sum feelin would of murked it. way to beat it up tho that was sumtn wrth watchin
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Re: Green Eyed

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thanks for the love and the feed guys, ill take the tips into consideration if ever i decide to do something like this again
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Re: Green Eyed

Post by TreTru »

Not bad for ya first.. I give ya props for finally puttin yaself out there..yo could do it with that laid back style but you gotta jus give it a lil more swag if your not gonna match the emotion of ya words..imo..keep doin it the more tracks you do and listen to..the more you'll notice the lil things that you could do better..it's the ONLY way to really elevate..1
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