Shadows

[QwarterZ]

I hit the sidelines, the walkway where the blind man dreams sight
see's life with feeling, and keeps strife where it leads light
I can't see like he might, embracing fate walkin' behold each line..........


I can sense ya presence before I met the essence
you regressed depression by the help you connected
from the background I felt like I should back out
I dropped, blacked out with fates arms in the wrap around
s'pose you were'nt here you'd probably see a hearse here
strong tears squirt here n not a voice is heard here
once waterworks clear then there'd be a verse here
I left at your third year but I'm glad that your here
cuz it let's me know that somehow you'd grow
learn to love the broken spirit that I behold
but the past is riddled wit reasons I can give you
but I can't give truth to you, you'll see it grow a little...
once you understand all I had thought n planned
as a young man but couldn't cuz then I couldn't then now I can't
before time takes me I hope I can take you to safety
my shadow shall brace thee as long as you can embrace me

[DaPrince]

The opening was dope and probably my favorite part although most of the lines in there are quotable. The concept was good and for the most part I felt the emotion behind it.

"but the past is riddled wit reasons I can give you
but I can't give truth to you, you'll see it grow a little..."

^^This was the only bar I had a problem with and it kinda through me off while I was reading it.

But aside from that the whole thing was the shit bro.

[ReFleXiOn]

pretty solid drop, noticed u used repitition on the word here which explains your comment in my thread lol. nah though, this piece was straight...

"before time takes me I hope I can take you to safety
my shadow shall brace thee as long as you can embrace me"

^solid closer...

Nice drop, keep doing ya thing playa. 1