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citizenslain
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the reality

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now who are you besides the product of mom and and dad
are you a product of the nirvana that kurt cobain had
and since he did it you was thinkin it was cool to bang H
now you a fiend and the product of sharin needles is AIDS
or actually HIV when you first contracted
got sick but fuck a doctor man you got a habit
im an addict to i know you gotta have it
soon as you cop some you get right back at it
or maybe you love to shop but aint got no cash
get you a credit card and start to spendin it fast
owe em thousands cant pay the bill that you have
next thing you know they done subpoened your ass
or maybe you watch tv and think its a tragedy
that young minorities on the street gotta rib to eat
step out your car one day staring at dark skin holdin heat
now you hate every single colored kid that you meet its the reality
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I like the concept behind this. If you put a bit more heat on your bars, all these niggas would feel this drop. I can tell you got dope story telling abilities and hope you stick around to post more.
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this was purdy dope...really had some nice lines
really good visuals, and the concept never fails to please
keep writing...I enjoy it
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Coo man. It's hella new and interesting way of doing hip hop. You don't really use multis or metaphors, but you're really poetic and if you got a sick drop on the microphone you could generate a new genre of hip hop. Look at Macklemore, he's fucking tight but he doesn't use multis or even rhyme half the time, but people are really feelin his shit.
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