Freestyle at Work

[Loon E Lou]

FUCKIN GIRL KEEPS MESSIN WIT ME

SO WUS THE DEAL NOW, I THOUGHT WE MADE IT CLEAR FROM THE GET.
I WOULD BE THE MONEY GETTA, YOU'D TAKE CARE OF THE KID.
NOW IT SEEMS AS THOUGH U GOIN BACK ON ALL THAT YOU SAID, GOIN BACK AND FORTH LIKE THIS, REALLY FUCKS WIT MA HEAD.
YOU WERE COOL, TILL YOU SAW ME BREAKIN BREAD WIT MA GOONS, NOW YOU ACT LIKE I AINT TRYNA SPEND TIME WITH YOU.
TRUST ME GIRL, MY MISSION WAS TO GIVE YOU THE WORLD. ALL THE FINEST LINGERIE, DIAMONDS AND PEARLS.
BUT APPARENTLY, MY LOVE FOR YOU WAS NEVA ENOUGH. ALWAYS THINKIN THAT IM OUT, PUTTIN DICK IN A BUTT.
FUCKIN WIT SLUTS, WHEN REALLY IM JUS TRYNA BUILD FOR US. ITS GONNA TAKE SOME TIME GIRL, THIS ROAD HAS NO SHORTCUTS.
IM SORRY IF I LOOK LIKE I AINT TRYNA TAKE PART, BUT THIS MONEY KEEPS CALLIN, BABY OPEN YA HEART.
AND LEMME STASH THESE COUPLE G'S, FOR OUR TRIP OVERSEAS, CUS MY STEEZ IS, SURE TO HAVE THESE PEOPLE AT OUR KNEES.
SO PLEASE.... TAKE THE TIME TO GIVE YA BOY SOME TIME, CUS LIFE WITHOUT MY BONNIE BRINGS CEASE TO THIS CLYDE.

-- Tue May 04, 2010 11:34 pm --

[FlipSide]

TRUST ME GIRL, MY MISSION WAS TO GIVE YOU THE WORLD. ALL THE FINEST LINGERIE, DIAMONDS AND PEARLS.
BUT APPARENTLY, MY LOVE FOR YOU WAS NEVA ENOUGH. ALWAYS THINKIN THAT IM OUT, PUTTIN DICK IN A BUTT

LMAO...! Funny but dam true man... Reminds me of ma baby momma... then i did go out and put dick to but LOL... i can relate to this shit..which is for the most part basic as my written but the topic captivates

[Munteskue_lol]

This is real shit. It's funny, but heartfelt. You killed this one. Flow was tight too.

[QwarterZ]

this was cool
the structure kinda threw it off for me
but good nonetheless a very nice piece
kept the flow and story on point
keep doin' you!

[Loon E Lou]

good lookin out fellas. baby mama was fuckin wit me all week so i finally put it on sumtn. im not too much of a script dude so any flaws please let ya boy know. gracias agin

[complexity]

I'd like to see you spit this to a girl. You'd get slapped into the next century.

On that note. I always think that your writtens aren't meant to be taken serious at all because of the capitalization and idiocy of the lines. In reality, the first part of this drop, flowed very nicely, and it was pretty funny.

I'll give this a 5 out of 10. Keep in mind that I'm feeling gracious though, I would like to see a bit more effort.

[MOEstradamus]

structure was crazy lol this piece was alright i mean im with plex i think this is ment to be funny but it was alright nothing to great about it flow was nice here and there but youve never been a texter mostly audio where u destroy good lil piece tho bro keep it up