PlayBoy Ny$e - In my picture frame (rapid fire)

[nyse]

took it apon myself to sing the chourus.
Also wanted to flip the toung....

I have been going through a rough time personaly.
with the events of dealing with life as is. just like all of you.
The only thing thats keeping me going is this music stuff. lol

Im about 9 songs deep in this album. I'm working hard and
staying focused. Please give me some feed back. I realy want to hear from my peeps on the btnh board. Much love and GOD bless
forever and day....

http://www.www.illestlyrics.com/copyrig ... 11602715c/

[FlipSide]

beats nice..... kinda like twista but i think u should slow it jus a bit so i can understand at least 1 of 3 words... i grew up to dudes that flow like this and twista and bone had a way of slowing and accenting some parts so that the enunciation gives a lil more of understanding...its not easy to tongue twist and takes mad skill sun...so i give u mad props...

[nyse]

ThankZ FlipSide, You know the legistics of rappid fire rappin' so i appreciate the LuV.
Not every rapper' can make this type of flow sound convincing.
I'm just trying to do something absolutly different, Than what is the norm in hip-hop today.

[Lawgix]

okay...

this was pretty good... quality is good... you spit QUICK son!!! buuuut i see a bit of flaw in it... its not smooth enuff... when you start its okay... when u come to a closing bar tho... slow it down... make it sound better than what you sound now... its kinda hard to explain... like dragging out the few words u feel like stopping at... make it transition into ur chorus which by the way was fire cuz u gotta good voice... i guess what i'm saying is try n take ur flow n mold it around Tech N9ne Bone and Twista and just make urself a bad ass style of rapping without biting them of course lol... you got some potential and i wanna see what else u can do... this was a good track but it was hard to follow along... cuz u spit so damn fast... so try n make it so where the listener knows what the hell ur saying cuz i can see if their listening to you and driving their gonna end up crashing tryin to figure wtf ur saying... lol... but good shit... work on ya deliverance of ur lyrics... its one thing to spit fast but its how and the way you spit it...

[FlipSide]

i agree with lawgix....try listening to some do or die... or the po pimpin niggaz that spit with twista... a lot of that style is used in chicago and the mid west.. which leads me to think u from this area..so u would kno who im speaking of...Do or Die has that laid back tongue twisting flow...but they use the playa/pimp shit and slow it down like lawgix said at the end of the bars... over all u got skillz..

[nyse]

Lawgix thx and flipside thanks again.
I grew up listening to twista, bone thugs, do or die, and tech... I know what exsactly what you mean about the
excentuation on certain words usualy at the end of a bar.or placed on the 2nd or fourth beat. that would absoutly sound smoother...

the thing is this song has alot of agression. Smoothness
was nothing i was looking for. I wanted the verses to sound like a machine gun going off...leaving the listener no time to recover from each bar. creating like a overload to the ears. I also made sure
to pronunciate each word legibly. the thing is my toung
might be a lil' too fast for the ear lol.
I will quote you lawgix...
"Don't Let The Game Make U, Make Urself"
I refuse to model myself after others...


yo, yaull feed back is appreciated 10 fold my brothers.

-- Tue Jun 08, 2010 11:21 am --

i herd some of yaul stuff. and i love getting feed back from real m.c.s flipside and lawgix.
oh yeah im from rhode island. i will post a east coast
track soon.

[FlipSide]

cant wait to hear ya flow to and east coast beat

[Deciple]

When you hear the intro and the beat you dont expect the fast spit like you throw, it was surprising but i caught myself saying, "Heck yeah, Now this is tight" i also experiment with fast rap, if you can find it, i have a track on here called Higher Education (1st verse), Battle Time (3rd Verse), and Mama Told Me (1st verse), that all switch from regular to fast rap and back, I really like your last verse, i like hearing artist rapping bout God and all, cuz thats what im all about, im a Christian Rapper lol, Good track bro, and the machine gun idea would have totally make this song a full blow killer

[QwarterZ]

This was purdy sick, I like rapid fire flows
either way the beat was crazy so were the lyrics
I can see me bumpin' this when you fix it up a bit
keep writing, and keep dropping man, good ass job