PLEASE LEAVE SOME FEEDBACK - NEWB

[EMEYE]

This is one of my tracks. The others are on soundclick.com/emeye2010 .

I just started recording 3-4 months ago. Some feedback and critisism would really help. There are 4 songs on my soundclick page, that are all between 1 and 3 minutes long. All of them feature one of my friends on the track too, but I think you'll get the idea of which one is me.

Thanks in advance I really need some help.

-- Wed Aug 04, 2010 10:00 am --

EDIT - ATTACHMENT FIXED !

[Sentus]

Your flow needs alot of work. It sounded really forced at times, you need to make it more natural, but that comes with practice. It sounds like you have good quality but you need to work on your mixing. I could mix it for you if you want.

[EMEYE]

Yea man I would love for you to mix some stuff for me. Message me on how we would go about that.

Thanks for the feedback too

[Lawgix]

i agree with Sentus... also EMOTION EMOTION EMOTION!!!! you sound too dry man... like a robot...

[FlipSide]

dude ur rhymes are descent... as far as writing them... ur delivery needs work.... i would repeat the same track several times at different times and days... let the mood u in show u how it affects ur delivery.. and then use that energy to carry u...quality is descent... ur hook needs delivery hard too... other than that u on time for most the beat and ur mixing jus needs a lil work... u have the potential u just need to develop your skill...

[EMEYE]

Thanks a lot for the feedback this is great lol I joined like 3 different sites before I found this one, and none of them ever gave feedback. I will definitly try to work on my delivery and emotion big time I feel the same way actually, and I will definitly start listening and dropping feedback on others peoples songs.

[MesaR]

It's alright man, some decent wordplay and pun's in your verse, i didn't like the hook the much, even though it reminded me of "if i had" by eminem, the first guy is heaps better then the second dude, the second dude's lyrics are whack and he isn't the best flower either, keep dropping tracks.

[Kau the Lion]

Second guy needs a lot of work. His delivery is too stiff. Your delivery is much better but still needs work. Like they said, just practice. Keep spitting the song until it almost sounds like another dudes verse to you. You know how it's much easier to flow when you're spitting some shit you heard on the radio.

[QwarterZ]

This was purdy cool, the emotion wasn't there tho'
you need to put that in there, this track sounds dope tho'
it just needs some work, the hook sounds like it's part of your verse
either way it sounds like you guys were just all drunk spitting
lulz...but either way you guys got some lyrics, just need to work on execution
keep doing your thing man!!!!!!