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Always A Newb

Post by FlipSide »

I Didnt Edit Or Erase or Correct Spelling... I Jus Wrote It Fast n Posted... Free Shots All Day




Bringing The Statik Shocking The Critiks With Spits That Infuced With Acid
Make It Automatik And Lay Down Raps-In Ya Casket With A Craftmatik
I Dont Practice For Test's That Score Against Average Im Raising The Curve
Ta Question Ya Worth Like The IRS At Yer Door.. Ya Rhyming Is Poor
Settle The Score But Aint no Meddle Award Im Unscaved, Murder The War
Replaced The Fodder With A Humbled Soldier With The Aim Of Cyborgs
Bring Flame To Eye Sores Like Im Skull Fuckin Sockets On Walls
Fuck it Im Raw Like I Done Peeled Skin Jaggin My Sword At Ya Hoes
Get Off Ur Knees bitch im Meaning Im Really Ready To Blow....Kids
Get ya Weight Up Cuz These White bread Fucks Doing They Push ups
Tho I Feed on The Beef Like Protein Is My Ammo Gas Spit Fire Thru Candles
I Doubt u Waxed AnyThing on The Mic Bro And This Not Jacksons Trial
You not A Wittness Man My lyrics Stand Like The Bin Laden In Afganistan
Stop Fisting Ya Self I Hand His Ass Ta The lower Class Sharing The Wealth
Dont Fold And Gimmie ya Tell Twitch in ya Keys Like Ya Bettin ya House
Run At The Mouth And Ill Put Feet At Ya Jaw N Sprint You A Clef
Claiming Correct but Failing the Test When No Answers Were Best
Get A Head And Now u Pimpin Heh? Heard What i Said....Read It Again
This Aint A Give N Win U Earn What U Get So i Been Slappin Bitches
BANG BANG!!!! I Shot U Down
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Re: Always A Newb

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a Question Ya Worth Like The IRS At Yer Door.. Ya Rhyming Is Poor
best line IMO

had some solid lines, alot to build off of
flow was a bit choppy at times.. but overall cool for a quick post.
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Re: Always A Newb

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Bringing The Statik Shocking The Critiks With Spits That Infuced With Acid
Make It Automatik And Lay Down Raps-In Ya Casket With A Craftmatik
I Dont Practice For Test's That Score Against Average Im Raising The Curve
Ta Question Ya Worth Like The IRS At Yer Door.. Ya Rhyming Is Poor
Settle The Score But Aint no Meddle Award Im Unscaved, Murder The War
Seemed Kinda Random, But This is What Stuck Out To me
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Re: Always A Newb

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-EDIS-PILF- wrote:I Didnt Edit Or Erase or Correct Spelling... I Jus Wrote It Fast n Posted... Free Shots All Day




Bringing The Statik Shocking The Critiks With Spits That Infuced With Acid
Make It Automatik And Lay Down Raps-In Ya Casket With A Craftmatik

[Any time the word craftmatic comes to mind, discard]

I Dont Practice For Test's That Score Against Average Im Raising The Curve
Ta Question Ya Worth Like The IRS At Yer Door.. Ya Rhyming Is Poor

[I don't get the punch there]

Settle The Score But Aint no Meddle Award Im Unscaved, Murder The War
Replaced The Fodder With A Humbled Soldier With The Aim Of Cyborgs

[Favorite line thusfar]

Bring Flame To Eye Sores Like Im Skull Fuckin Sockets On Walls
Fuck it Im Raw Like I Done Peeled Skin Jaggin My Sword At Ya Hoes

[If you would have ended that with a better rhyme, that would have been sick]

Get Off Ur Knees bitch im Meaning Im Really Ready To Blow....Kids
Get ya Weight Up Cuz These White bread Fucks Doing They Push ups

[Yes I am]

Tho I Feed on The Beef Like Protein Is My Ammo Gas Spit Fire Thru Candles
I Doubt u Waxed AnyThing on The Mic Bro And This Not Jacksons Trial

[Ok]

You not A Wittness Man My lyrics Stand Like The Bin Laden In Afganistan
Stop Fisting Ya Self I Hand His Ass Ta The lower Class Sharing The Wealth

[Dece]

Dont Fold And Gimmie ya Tell Twitch in ya Keys Like Ya Bettin ya House
Run At The Mouth And Ill Put Feet At Ya Jaw N Sprint You A Clef
Claiming Correct but Failing the Test When No Answers Were Best
Get A Head And Now u Pimpin Heh? Heard What i Said....Read It Again
This Aint A Give N Win U Earn What U Get So i Been Slappin Bitches

[Don't know]
The best part about this whole drop was the transitions: they were nice. I don't know if I felt too many of the punchlines, a lot of them ended with weak rhymes. Not terrible, something that surely could be improved on.

Write them bars until your hands fall off, this was a valid effort, I expect more.
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Re: Always A Newb

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Thanks Plex... I Will ...Id Get Better if Dudes Hit The Chat As Well....
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