ekim b's first post on this site, give some feed back ya'll

[Ekim B]

sorta slaughter all my audibles, in honorable fashion/
sonic flow passin, all semi monotone rappers/
quiet, is not where im aimin, im loud as horn/
out a foreign land, im undoubtetly stormin/
like a monsoon, im on the moon level projectin/
protectin the new section you couldnt do at yur bestest/
best whatever i test the alphabet like a drill sarg/
to fill margins with ill attitudes like bill maher/
tha ill arsonistic instinct to burn compitition/
im a contridiction to badly writtin composition/
a raw tradition of spit kickin and real rap/
you feel that, like your skin got ripped and pealed back/
a victim im not, herd im not gonna follow suit/
of all the crews spittin im siftin, through all of you/
i follow through with threats, dusk to dawn like clooney/
involved in looney plots to blow up like shiite and sunnis/
like kites i movin heights above the rest of the pack/
im destined to map lesson for the rest of the class/

[Orfadox]

Yeah man that was aiight still nice flow good drop dude

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[Kau the Lion]

Flow was tight. Never fell off. Vocab was pretty good too. Good multies. A good intro to your lyrical abilities.

[AntiMaTTer]

nice shit, i was digging it

sorta slaughter all my audibles, in honorable fashion/
sonic flow passin, all semi monotone rappers/

as far as the "cleanliness" of the multis they were off, but the syllables match and i can make this easily rhyme when i read it, just saying some might say

"FASHION and RAPPER" dont rhyme cuz it dont end with ER or ION, but, the consonants rhyme

[QwarterZ]

This was decent for what it was...
kind of screams DON'T READ ME at the same time
which I didn't, but since it's still here
I think I'll peep it, nice lil' vibe
got a smooth lil' flow attached to it...
needs a lil' more focus on what's being executed
doesn't come off like anything special
just a key, you need to formulate a slick style to it
give a lil' more character brah...keep writing

[IntrinsicCadence]

Nice man, I'll like the consistent internal rhyming ya got in this piece. You got some nice metaphors. The only parts I didn't like as much were the 'bestest' thing, and the clooney/sunnis lines, but otherwise I thought this was real solid. Hope you stick around and post some more shit...

[TheNobleOne]

the flow was a little off here and there but it was a pretty solid drop. just work on tightening your shit up homie. holla.

[FlipSide]

This was a pretty descent drop to be your first on here...welcome to illest n stay active..