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lyrical1
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Deep thought

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Creating embankments containing the fountain of youth fluids without looseness or drainage/ are the omnipotent, articulate bars that garnered wings for the unwittingly scarred bare armed Icarus/
An eagle over water for sustenance never suffers wit spells of fear, the mind is clear, talons mustering/ up enough strength to bust what none other did/ Lyrical seer, know you fuckin wit none other than/
The cat that amalgamates Alpha dates after waits for the Omega to end so its activates/
To eliminate contaminated Alkaline Phosphatases in the body of hip hop, found near the outer waist/
Hence rage integrated amidst the innovate abyss I simulated in glyphs/ then renovated to grip what generated my spit wit no illness mitigation for imitators that diss/
I spent years on this craft, stayed in light speed travels/ To worlds where judges swings swords and knights need gavels/ And darkness is so deep set, if pierced, bleeds shadows/
Starving for illumination, chews wicks and eats candles/
The depth of world sovereignty is spiritual poverty,/ placing material on gaudy alters for honoring/ what the Creator thought would remain second to His artistry/ Where blessings and offerings are part of what is constantly/
Sought beyond this level of soul eating monsters/ populating a world believing success is in stardom/ Is it a Gift from God or devil induced bargain/ Feels like their getting robbed in a state of reduce conscious/
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Re: Deep thought

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I really liked this. Lots of creative methods of expression. The line:"And darkness is so deep set, if pierced, bleeds shadows/" is just straight awesome. One of the best lines I've read in these forums. I'm kinda jealous you came up with that line actually, I wish I had thought of it myself. I appreciate your use of vocabulary too. I do, however, feel there are a few lines here and there that don't totally seem necessary, if I had written this I'd probably go back and edit it up a bit and take out a few things then of course continue to add on to it if ur thinkin bout making this into an audio piece at all.
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