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Colossus
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One And The Same Keystyle

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Never meant to be lyrical, simply spittin it dude
It's pitiful, being conscious is a gimmick it's true
Those terrible tunes, got me cuppin my ears
Intoxicated off the flow hand me a mug and some beer
Stumble but still, cheers, spillin some lager
I trip and I falter, too crippled to walk-or
Think any longer, and now I've lost my potential
And the fall from the top isn't soft, isn't gentle
Often when little we were pretend we were special
Didn't know, when we'd grow at the bottom we'd settle
That's all, let me tell you, while you're huntin for fame
I tried and failed first we're just one and the same
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Re: One And The Same Keystyle

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I was feeling this. Nice deep little concept. Your flow was on point and it really meshed well together I liked it man I cant say anything other then that..coulda been a bit longer...seems like itd be a dope song though keep writing my dude

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Dope vibe, it was like 'whaaatever', total dark humour. Kinda short but I think any longer and it would've started dragging on, feels natural to me.

Rhymescheme and structure are cool, they stood out to me too, especially in the 1st half. 2nd half was great for the message, sounds like something you'd hear in Fight Club (the movie, not the forum). Keep droppin man.
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Post by Alvin »

I agree with Moe, a Fight Club movie type of theme. I liked your finishing line so much that it didnt bother me that it ended so soon. A little more to draw pictures in my head would of been nice. All in all, again some ish i wish i could write. Thumbs up homie
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This was dope for a free. I love the cynicism. Nice flow, multis were nice. Nothing else to say for such a short drop.

Those terrible tunes, got me cuppin my ears
Intoxicated off the flow hand me a mug and some beer
Stumble but still, cheers, spillin some lager
I trip and I falter, too crippled to walk-or
^^^I liked that
You can't hang without a rope....
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Re: One And The Same Keystyle

Post by The Man »

Just how I like my asian women, short and sweet.
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