The Subject of bars

[Immortal Javelin]

Ill make an exorcist impression, that has you second guessing
I beckon you with my rhymes the minute you step in,
but i hold more weight on my back than the old Jenny Graig,
minuscule with pro tools, in plenty ways, leave you scrapping for food like old stray's, back in the old days
i ignite my vocal tones, sicilian mobster impostor of al capone
im like richard nixon tapping ya phone, im like an archaeologist the way scavenge for ya bones
You come up missing, like unknown chromosome's
leaving trail's of dead mic's itching ya dome like extensive head lice//

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Not a bad drop i think maybe sort the flow out so the syllable count matches or maybe it is a audio more based drop but either way if you can find a way to emphasise the flow more would be good, the multies werent bad with the good use of vocabulary, not a great drop cause it was so short but not bad man

[Immortal Javelin]

thanks appreciate the feed very much man


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