people who doubted me ,

[lil crazy lane]

an 11 yr old girl , lived with her mom & brothers , her rent was always paid she sometimes had food in her stomach , she seen alot of things in her eyes . her mom always with a diffrant guy , always drung , the lil girl watched drugs getting made on her stove , she seen her own sep dad get murderd in her back yard , she started actin out , she learned she can take advantige of this siation , so she started smoken weed . didnt go to school , she just stayed high , then she started getting in to alchool , kepp in mind her mom is there but to fucked up to relize her lil girl is hurt and is starting to go down the wrong path , this lil girl watches her mom stumble around & her friends laugh at herr because of what her mom dose , this lil girl has so much pain she has never been showed love by this , her brothers beat her to make her strongee , on day this lil girl gets so sick of this she runs away , she gose to her dad , she gets put in school nd hse acts out , shes badd dosent listen , shes mean , she gets high , smokes nasty ciggs , she dosent kno that shes only hurting her self , she dosent kno that she cant prosper in life with out school , she dosent kno that schools wont put up with this , she asks her self why shes been put threw this & she hears of a god but she dosent belive tht if there was a such thing why would he let her hurt & be hurt this way , this lil girl gets kicked out of school , then gose back she relizes that she dosent want to live that life , ahe changes people doubted her told her she was nothin she sure showed themm , ahaha she sure did cause now shes 16 & in school & has a better life with her dad her teachers dont belive how muc shes changed , this is all she hadd to say to them when they doubted her P>S yuu haten muthafuckers were dead wrong told yuu mufucka day 1 i was gone do it i was gone do it strill yuu doughted me ,

[Joe Saint]

This has a lot of feeling in it the flow was ok but besides that this was a decent first drop.

7/10

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[Defiance]

fix the structure and you got something, unless you like to flow a paragraph instead of bars

but i liked it a lil basic but good meaning

keep it up