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Short Verse

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a teen infatuated with cream, never had dreams
always hung out with the wrong crowd in the streets
never believed an education would lead
a prosperous life through a college degree
captivated by glamorous, hollywood fame
couldn't refrain from watchin television all day
his mindset wasn't hard to explain
a school dropout, unable to maintain good grades
reality never sunk in but in back of his mind
constant thoughts of livin a life of crime
standin on streets corners from 9 to 5
an ambition and drive just to sell a dime
some call it survive, only to find more struggle
poisoning lives is what we doin to each other
never get trapped inside the games of a hustler
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Damn.. Bro.. I Think This was Pretty Cool.. Tha Flow Was Good.. It Had Ah' Audio Type Of Feel.. Good Read.. I Was Able To Feel It More Kuz Im Ah' Hustler.

Hopefully I'll See More Of You

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Definitely should be an audio piece, short sweet and to the point. Not anything special about it imo but then again, it shows storytelling potential, keep it up.

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what would be a good beat for this?
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racks on racks lol
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