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Just some qwik Cypher we were passing around elsewhere..might as well share with ya...

Now its 2017 the only sign from heaven seen
until this day were the seasons we were weathering.
thought this world would never be..look at us livin in dust..
american bills are worthless cuz their etched "In God We Trust"

were high as angel dust sluts spreading legs for shelter..
and No one knows he's king a crown of thorns but holds no ceptor.
to some he's still a savior in his image they bow and pray.
an some forgot all the teachings the lambs have lost their way.

and yet more will never listen to a thing he'll say..
cuz they all expected their Jesus to be a lighter shade?
now while they fornicate openly on every corner..
this sights reminding him vividly of scenes from gamora...

he's come to save us but most of us doubtin more shoutin..
millons left but he only saves one hundred 44,000..
i guess the prohets astounding..premonitions were founded..
to have clout and not clouded what people think about him..


he said we could move mountains , cause his likeness is our blue print
the hard times he carried us ,look at them "one set of shoe prints "
he says he gave us all the knowledge we need so use it..
flew off in his space ship..like im out you guys are STUPID!!
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lol this shit went hard.. all immortal technique like..

i liked the message behind the meaning.. felt real like a grain of salt.


i like the middle two stanzas the best


way to be man

Revolutionary but gangsta tre tru!
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This was pretty nice my dude, I like these cypher type pieces
it brings that old Hip Hop staying true, and for the consistency to stay in it...
makes it twice as better, it lets you know that you guys weren't just randomly spittin'
you though of a concept to bring to people and let it stick out in their minds
the multi usage was low, but it shouldn't matter when your spitting a real topic
the message alone sets the tone for the piece, nice way to start and end it my dude
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thanks guys..like i said this was a quick one
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Now its 2017 the only sign from heaven seen
until this day were the seasons we were weathering.
thought this world would never be..look at us livin in dust..
american bills are worthless cuz their etched "In God We Trust"

word.. I like that, got a cool vibe

were high as angel dust sluts spreading legs for shelter..
and No one knows he's king a crown of thorns but holds no ceptor.
to some he's still a savior in his image they bow and pray.
an some forgot all the teachings the lambs have lost their way.

staying on topic.. building up.. flow good

and yet more will never listen to a thing he'll say..
cuz they all expected their Jesus to be a lighter shade?
now while they fornicate openly on every corner..
this sights reminding him vividly of scenes from gamora...

This was cool

he's come to save us but most of us doubtin more shoutin..
millons left but he only saves one hundred 44,000..
i guess the prohets astounding..premonitions were founded..
to have clout and not clouded what people think about him..

Nice

he said we could move mountains , cause his likeness is our blue print
the hard times he carried us ,look at them "one set of shoe prints "
he says he gave us all the knowledge we need so use it..
flew off in his space ship..like im out you guys are STUPID!!

Good Ending..

this was a pretty good drop, flow on point.. topic consistent
executed well.. I liked it, anyways keep dropping tre
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