"no court no case"

[Haz]

On My Way Boxin Deze Niggaz
Lyk Cashis Clay..Runin DAMN
Back Up Came/
Sack Bust Frame Nuts Atmosphere/
"MAD" Cops But I Dont Act Wid
Fear..Keep My Feet Goin
Action "GEAR"/
No One In Presence My
Senses Tension (Ask Ya Ears)/
Door Lock'd Da Axe Is Here
Fast N Clear Cash Is Near/
Robb Da Sto.. Life
Ayn A Party "POP UM HOMEZ"/
Rot Da Scope Sick Hits/
Knock Um Back 2 Hyroglificz
i'll Stay In Da "SKY" Hydro Big Hits/
Spit By No Gimmickz i'll Try N
Finish/ "Bars Closed"..I Bounced
Random "Figure" Bar Code/
Wrong Guy My Fate Is Chillen/
I Ayn Fallin Gravity "PHASE-Da-CEILIN"/
Taste Da Millionz... Caged Ayn
Me/My Team Lyk Bandana's B "Race Fa G's!!"/

[complexity]

It had a ghostface type of feel to it. It was a nice little read. I didn't get into the story much though.

Keep doing your thing though.

[kid vishuz]

i like the rhyme scheme. keep on writin.

[8th]

http://illestlyrics.com/board/important ... vt2163.htm

^read before postingl

[Subsist]

As i said earlier hazard without leaving a vote link you wont get much feedback , its been psychologically proven. lol

[Street Pharmacist]

this was pretty good..

[drunken jesus]

i'll leave the same comment on this piece, you need vocab work, almost all your rhymes are forced and unatural

read the advice i posted in general discussion