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Have A Nice Life.(Micz& Demented Mind)

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get em micz

destruction is nothing, theres people dying from gun busting or something
criminals asking questions to judges, judges are just judgin their question
murder she wrote, she murdered him cold
he was old but bold, but she slaughtered his throat
thats what u call murder, also known as homicide
we call it suicide, when idiots want to die
its annoying ways to kill are constantly expanding
its poison, when usually a liquid substance causes internal damage
but theres more, presidents kill through wars
they cheer the rich, but slowly kill the poor
as soldiers bomb Iraq we hope terrorist wont bomb us back
devastating death id rather have a heart attack
theres cancer, still havent found the answer
and AIDs, it sometimes kills private dancers
with guns they kills strong,dying from ills, or real bombs
a kill for a kill where im from, through micz the dead live on. live strong

so basically what im trying to say is, life is short, hard, and sad
shit happens, but nothings worth takin a life over, in my opinion
dont just take it from me, let demented tell you...

ayo,me im from a place,where the dept of death will be all over ur face
surrounded by multiple grim reapers that u can smell and taste
death is a fate,that dosent feel sorrow,its a black shawdow that follows
deciding wether u die today or tommorow
so every day i inhale the essence to take my mind away from the presence i
was sentenced to this countrys menace
the rich white boys that are too spoiled
hispanic n blacks blood being spread on the iraqi soil
while others get attacked n slaughtered for there oil
in these streets u gotta live life in a hurry
theres no explination to the feeling of a mother when her son gets buried
murdered with no worry,in the middle of the city by ruthless niggas that dont even feel a little bit pity
innocent people get killed over respect,just to get rep in there set
outlines of bodys on the floor with there head severed from there neck
iive seened death so i charish evry 1 of my last breaths
cuz u dont die so often,im not shure about a dead mans perspective from a coffin
so its a must to live strong n keep walking,cuz when ur heart stop life goes on,word is bond kid.

have a nice life.
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Post by complexity »

I liked micz keeping it relevant to what is going on in the world. That is always good. Haven't seen you do that to much. Your rhyme scheme was on point. And you questioned some deep topics. Eight bars didn't seem like enough though. Good shit. A few of your bars were a little simplistic. Felt it either way though.

Demented. Honestly I can't complain about your verse to much either. From the thug perspective. Per say. Some shit didn't make that much sense though.

"so its a must to live strong n keep walking,cuz when ur heart stop life goes on,word is bond kid"

"the rich white boys that are too spoiled
hispanic n blacks blood being spread on the iraqi soil
while others get attacked n slaughtered for there oil
in these streets u gotta live life in a hurry"

Rich black kids are spoiled to. Poor people period go to war.

It could have been a lot better. Maybe if you both would have spent longer on your verses. Though I'm still going to give it 8.3.
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complexity wrote:I liked micz keeping it relevant to what is going on in the world. That is always good. Haven't seen you do that to much. Your rhyme scheme was on point. And you questioned some deep topics. Eight bars didn't seem like enough though. Good shit. A few of your bars were a little simplistic. Felt it either way though.

Demented. Honestly I can't complain about your verse to much either. From the thug perspective. Per say. Some shit didn't make that much sense though.

"so its a must to live strong n keep walking,cuz when ur heart stop life goes on,word is bond kid"

"the rich white boys that are too spoiled
hispanic n blacks blood being spread on the iraqi soil
while others get attacked n slaughtered for there oil
in these streets u gotta live life in a hurry"


Rich black kids are spoiled to. Poor people period go to war.

It could have been a lot better. Maybe if you both would have spent longer on your verses. Though I'm still going to give it 8.3.
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well that was my point there poor people die in wars.while rich kids live on in the wonderful life.
u dont usualy see rich black or white people in wars.




"so its a must to live strong n keep walking,cuz when ur heart stop life goes on,word is bond kid"

dosent life go on for others after u die?.
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congrats demented you've really improved your structure and flow.
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Post by Haz »

Nice 16 Micz .. I Like The Way Your Verse Was Structured And Emotion Put in it ..
Demented Mind I Also Liked Yours Stuck On The Emotions Given Off Nicely .. Props
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

thats what u call murder, also known as homicide
we call it suicide, when idiots want to die

lol definetly true ^..but ur flow was on point ur structure wuz gud..i cant really say u need 2 express more emotion n whatever cuz i didnt feel u needed 2 with this piece...good ish man keep droppin -1-
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