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Let Fate Awake Then Break Ya Face,
Im a Ghost You've Waked This Place
Haunts Forever/ Strike With Fire Like
Stormy Weather, Pussy Get Ripped
Like "Horny Stepper"/ Left Wet
From Your Own Baretta, Never
Hot You Dont OWN A Sweata/
Complex With Repp Deep Meanin
In My Bein , Protect Ya Self Heat
Leavin (Now U Bleedin)/
Its Sick How i'm iLL Mind Twisted,
Let Clips Blow N Kill 9's Spittin/
i'll Buy Victums The Way They Bag'd,
Leave Homos Bent Like The Gayest Fags/
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you were improving but this seems like a step in the wrong direction
Let Fate Awake Then Break Ya Face,
Im a Ghost You've Waked This Place
Haunts Forever
you went in and out of the first and thir person in that, you've needs to be changed to i've and "haunts" needs to be changed to either haunting or haunt
Strike With Fire Like
Stormy Weather, Pussy Get Ripped
Like "Horny Stepper"/
typical person doesn't really think of fire striking with stormy weather, and "horny stepper" that doesn't really make sense, i dunno what you were referring to their
From Your Own Baretta, Never
Hot You Dont OWN A Sweata/
wordplay was way to basic, you need to step your creativity up
i'll Buy Victums The Way They Bag'd,
Leave Homos Bent Like The Gayest Fags/
buy victims doesn't really make sense unless your referring to putting a hit out, its still never phrased buy victims, and "leave homos" bent like the "gayest fags" isn't a good similie your basically repeating the same shit you could say "leave dudes" but saying "leave homos" then repeating the gay reference makes it simplistic and ineffective
Let Fate Awake Then Break Ya Face,
Im a Ghost You've Waked This Place
Haunts Forever
you went in and out of the first and thir person in that, you've needs to be changed to i've and "haunts" needs to be changed to either haunting or haunt
Strike With Fire Like
Stormy Weather, Pussy Get Ripped
Like "Horny Stepper"/
typical person doesn't really think of fire striking with stormy weather, and "horny stepper" that doesn't really make sense, i dunno what you were referring to their
From Your Own Baretta, Never
Hot You Dont OWN A Sweata/
wordplay was way to basic, you need to step your creativity up
i'll Buy Victums The Way They Bag'd,
Leave Homos Bent Like The Gayest Fags/
buy victims doesn't really make sense unless your referring to putting a hit out, its still never phrased buy victims, and "leave homos" bent like the "gayest fags" isn't a good similie your basically repeating the same shit you could say "leave dudes" but saying "leave homos" then repeating the gay reference makes it simplistic and ineffective
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]
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