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Where I Stand

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It's Like Dudes Be Hatin-On-Me You Beef Wit One An Face-An-Army/
But You Fakes-Can't-Harm-Me I'll Leave Ya Facial A Razor-Party/
An Why You Raised The Hate-Up-On-Me, Is The Only Thing That's Way-Beyond-Me/
Cuz You Aint-By-Far, You're Like A King Battlin Me When I'm A Ace-Of-Cards/
Mad Cuz I Blazed-You-Hard, Even Micz Agreed Now He's Takin-His-Part/
In-The-Beef Like He's Harder-Then-Me 15, Like How Hard-Can-You-Be?/
You're A Scarf Split Apart-At-The-Seems, I'm Large With The Heart-Of-A-Beast/
I Do-What-I-Can I Don't Lose Cuz I'm Wack I Lose-To-Advance/
An Always Pay-My-Dues-In-Advance, It's Like When I Lose-I-Just-Glance/
At The Dude-That-Advanced To A Higher-Rank, Never Am I-Irate/
Look In They Eyes-Like-Great, Notepad Writein Ryhmes-All-Day/
Never Bitch-An-Complain I Spit-To-Remain At The Tip-Of-My-Game/
Lost My Head For A Minute-I-Aint, Gonna Deny-That-Fact/
I Even Tried To Apologise-To-Cats The Way I Implied-It's-Wack/
So This Is My Reply-To-That, Where I Really An Truely-Stand/
Just Don't Get It Twisted I'm Just Dooly-anne, Payin My Dues-Again/
An Mic Just Feels Influy-enced to Attemp To Try An Do-Me-In/
When He Can Consume-Me-Friend, Lost His Mind An Flew The Looney-Bin/
But As Far As Me Complex-Go, I've Squashed An Let-Go-Of-This-Beef/
So If There's A Grudge You Hold Against-Me, We Can Battle Again But Over A Beat!/

:::::Dooly-anne, Meaning Dootlin,Or Dootling:::::
:::::Influy-Enced, Meaning Influenced:::::
:::::Consume-Me-Friend, Friend Meaning Dick:::::

I Wrote This Cuz I'm Bored, It's Nothin Against Complex Cuz As Far As I Know We Squashed Shit, unless This Is Just Some IllestLyrics Beef Cuz We Got Along Fine In that MSN Convo lol But Word. Micz Get Eat A Dick Though lmao.
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Post by 16 Micz »

lol....impressive.
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Post by Momeijah »

Well Mac's Livin Up 2 His Award Pretty Nicely So Far. Consistent Multis The Whole Way Thru And Stayed On Topic. Flow And Structure Was Nice. Are u Gnna Do This Audio? a Few More Verses And it Can Be a Solid Track.
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Post by Mac »

Nah, Only Way I'm Gonna Do A Track Is When That Audio Anniversary Takes Place, Or If Complex Wants To Audio Battle Or What Ever. But This Particular Flow Or Situation, Nah Even Though I Wrote It To A Beat But Lol It's All Good. ::thanks for the feed though man::
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Post by drunken jesus »

rhyme scheme was good some of the bars were worded awkwardly though, it was lacking on disses being a diss verse but overall it wasn't bad
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
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Post by Haz »

It Was A Decent Verse In My Opinion
Good Shit .. Most Of The Multis Hit Righ n Made
Sense In A Few Parts Ya Flow Sort Of Threw Me
Off To Where I Was Buggin It Was Only Maybe 2 Bars Though
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Post by Mac »

Thanks For The Feed Back Folks. Addressing All killah, It Wasn't An Actual Diss Track, If So I Agree It Would Have Been Lacking In Punches, But If You've Seen My Battles I'm Consistent With Disses. But Thanks For The Feed Back Man.
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