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[align=center]if U Niggas Think i`m Talkin` about Y`all ..
i Probably am ..

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Holla at `em Haz !!

Hazard : i See Mouths Runnin Like Dentist Surgery, Robbin Artists Of Lyrics End Your Burglery/Im Surgicly Removin You Out Da Game I See Da White In Ya Skin like u About Da Cane/ He Like Child Developement Pussy Seep OutSide His Brain/

Rell.Fiasco : i`ll Put Tha Heat, Outside His Brain, He a Lame When it Comes to Rell ..//.. But Please Explain Sumptin` to Rell ..//.. is How ya Niggas Gon` Dump From Tha Shells, When Tha Eights Sprayin` ..//.. U Went From "Black to White" & No Niggas This ain`t No "Face Paintin`" ..//..

Hazard : Never Spittin Fire Ya Figure "Phaze-Satan", You Bled Hair i Ripp'd You in Half, Ya Son Got Red Hair, Ur Black How You Gunna Pass?/i'll Remove Them Red Hairs Like Breakin Budd, My Prescense Is "Eclipse" No Way To Save ya Son/ You Got Raped now Run Ya Face About Some Rumors Said/Put Da Chrome To ya Dome Dem Chappy Lips Gun Fuse Ya Head Like "Blew-Wit-Head"/ Never Blew The Bread Like Jewish Population/ "Suck My M-16" You Liein Ass Fiene Hugest Occuptain, Got Da Glockz Jus Waitin Oppose Me Bro/i'll Skin Ya White Take Da Burna You'll "Grow-Negro"/

Rell.Fiasco : i`ma Have to Blow These Foes, & Leave `em Wit They Head Popped ..//.. U Wanna Run to Tha Jakes, Then They`ll Have to Pledge to another Dead Cop ..//.. Tellin` 12 Year Olds .... Wat Tha Rumors Were ... But Wanna Give Props in Mah Threads ??..//.. Look Who U Chasin`, This Dude Pacin` ..//.. i Heard U in "Harlem" But i also Heard U "Shakin`" ..//.. U Shoulda Been an "Extra For Batman" `cus U Juss "Two Faced" ..//..

Hazard : Split Ya Image When Dat Tool Spray, Sayin you Got Coke On Each Street/Like Late Cartoon Network Let Dat "cheese Speak", Sprayin ya Hopez when u Breathe Heat/Pushin Coke When u Cant Afford Pepsi Cheap Green, Like Bad Product/Think u Da Shit Have u "Half-Flopp'd-Gutz", Actor On Screen Like Popp Ups/i'll Pack Each Piece Have u Popp'd In Up Like T.i. Live in The Sky/Drop'd Nutz When i Cock back Pussy Gettin Spread Like Gimme Ya Thighs/

Rell.Fiasco : i`m Hopin` Out Tha Range Like Haz Gimmie Tha Nine ..//.. it`s Nothin` Nigga For Them Semi`s to Fly ..//.. Never Lettin` Niggas Survive When Tha Gun Blow ..//.. Then They Momz Juss "Lost One" .. No Relations to "Young Hov" ..//.. Some Loads, Will Juss Peel ya Wig ..//.. Spreadin` to 12 Year Olds, i Guess U Juss Feel ya Kid ..//.. i "BET" U ain`t Nicer Than Me, Not "Black Star Power" But U Tha "Bid" ..//..

Hazard : Bust Ya Spit i'll Rush My Hitz Punch Dis Crip Crushed Wit Tips/i'll Get Da Pump N Shit Fa Rell, Come Jump Wit Clipse(Clipz) Like Fa-Rell(Pharrell)/This Aint No Skunk Sell Still Get 'bagged Green', "Inhail Tha Pump" Punk Like A Gas Fiene/i'll Ripp J Den Twist A L, Ya Script Gay Get Raped Wit Barz Befo Da Cell/ Pour The Shells Like Turtle Nestin.. i'll "Son This Bitch" Like Fertile Sexin/

Rell.Fiasco : i Heard U Textin` .... Kick Dash Flip Dash Rell .. U Spit Trash, Kiss Ass, FRaiL ! ..//.. i Will Kick ass, Get Cash, Yell .... //.. to Them Niggas That`ll Grip Snubs, Juss to Light ya Bitch Up ..//.. How i Clip Slugs ??.. No .. i Got "People to Do Mah Dirty Work For Me" Like a "Strip Club" ..//.. But Never Tip `em ....... Sumptin` `bout Rell, That Gurlies Wanna Let Go Bettah ..//.. U Say U "Sick & Thug" But Never Clip Those Leadahs ..//.. Not "Lil Jon" But Once i Hit U "Yell" U Won`t Be "Okay" But U`ll "Get Low" Better ..//.. `cus i Do Mah "Dirt" Than ya "Ecko Sweater" .......... ya Bitch Don`t Even Fuck Wit Me No More, `cus ya Hoe Know Better .. LMAO .. Haha ..

Hazard : Put "Mad-In-Ya-Lid" Like Flows Temper, Join Ya Mom On Da Block When i Got Da Glock "Blow-Member"/Ya Gunz Neva On i'll Throw Handz u Dont Pass no Harm/Gangsta Net Datin Daniella Only Time u "Grab'd-Half-A-Arm"/Suckin Like "Blow Pops" Askin ya Mom, Flow Garbage This Ho Retarded/Join The bus U Got Skool'd Ya Brainz Departin , Dat Painz Jus Sparkin Like Twin tower Hits/Eatin Cupcakez At Grandma When You Git "Powder-Kid".. Im Outta it Mentally insane/ Chopp'd Ya nervous System Centrally No Vainz Bleedin Thru Each Stain/ Feedin Off "Terror" Like George Bushes Election, U "Closest To Pussy" Even ya Whore give Off Erection/

Rell.Fiasco : U Could Feed Off This Wesson, & Gurls ??.. i Got Plenty i Could Pipe ..//.. Semi Juss Fly & Light ...... Clips Until Many Die By Strikes ..//.. & if i Got about 16 Hatas, i`ma Make about 20 By Tonight ..//.. `cus When i`m On Tha Tracks i Go all Out Boy ..//.. "Yell Wit Tha Steel" & Make U Feel Like U "Called Out Toys" ..//.. i Got Tha "Heavy Metal" To Make U "Fall Out Boy" ..//.. PAUSE! Tha Chrome .......... Fuck it, i`ll Let Mah Boy "Cal See Him / Calcium" Like "it`s a Good Cause For Bones" ..//.. .................. U Faggots Can Hate Me Now, No Relations Wit Nasir Jones .. Yupp !!
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Post by Momeijah »

Lmao Nice Goin Troops. Notice How Hazard's Verses Look Better in That Kinda Structure? Anyway, Hit The Topic, Multis Were On Target n Flow, Nice Wordplay n Mettas From Both. 1 Of The Better Collabs i Seen On Here Tho. So Keep Droppin Lol Peace
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^^ .. GoodLookin` Out Dom` ..
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Post by precise »

aright, well there were some decent lines n everything, but to be completely honest it wasnt to fluent.

like, wording was pretty odd, the way multies would switch up at the end of almost everybar

i donno, you 2 have skills but this definately aint one of my favorite pieces from ya, i think dominos on crack or something lol
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Why Dont u Kiss My Crack Lool
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Fav Lines:.. U Went From "Black to White" & No Niggas This ain`t No "Face Paintin`"

Pushin Coke When u Cant Afford Pepsi Cheap Green, Like Bad Product/Think u Da Shit Have u "Half-Flopp'd-Gutz", Actor On Screen Like Popp Ups/

Rell: i think this the first written i read from u, it wasnt bad but there was some faults with it..for one i didnt like the structure at all, most textcees do bars in 2 lines, not in a paragraph seemed like a battle verse to me...another thing i didnt like was the flow was a lil off here and there and threw me off from time to time...but AS for the positive aspects...there were some nice multis some hard to capture but still nice, another thing is the topic and the way u dissed someone and didnt really put their name out(i still dotn know who it is, hopefully it aint me cause i seen 16 in that post a few times lol jk) i also liked how u and haz stayed on the same page throughout the drop..nice chemistry...keep it up. nice drop

Hazard: ok you kind of had the same things as rell that i disliked, the structure and flow....but u did have some nice multis here and there and a nice rhyme scheme...another thing u guys sort of lacked was vocab,not saying u should use a dictionary every line but try to show u have some intelligence and u understand what ur doing. your verse wasnt bad at all either keep it up i showed u guys my fav lines...

overall: 7.5 keep it up..
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

it Wasn`t Written ..
it Was a Keystyle Cypher On MSN Wit Hazard ..
Lol .. But i Think it Was Good For Some Keystyle Type ish ..
Thanks For Tha Feed Back Everybody ..
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Post by Haz »

Aiight 16 Micz Good Lookin Out i'll Acknoledge Dat Vocab Comment lol Feed Backz Great

Precise i Feel u U've Seen Better From Both Of Us it Was Off Da Top Of The Dome

Domino lol Thanks For The Structure Comment it Is Eazia To Read Yea Good Lookin Out
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Post by precise »

ahh ok, well i didnt realize it was off the top so its definately decent, but yea i seen alot better from you two lol
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GoodLookin` Out Young PrecisE ..
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