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MesaR
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This Is What Were Living In..

Post by MesaR »

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All Races Just Seem To Egnite The Flame Racist Remarks Just Feed-The-Pain..//
I Wanna Quit And Leave The Game, Who cares bout skin couler when we bleed-tha-same..//
Were Out Of Minds We Need-a-Brain..We Gotta Keep It Real And Just Leave-The-Fame..//
I Do Belive-In-Pain..But Were Humans Not Animals But We Cant Acheive-Were-Tame..//
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Life Isnt a Fair Trail Because Were all Guilty For The Things-We-Done..//
A Kid At School Couldnt Take It And Decided To Bring-His-Gun..//
People Thought He Was Crazy Wonted Him Dead, Couldnt Sleep At Night..//
Thats Fine You Can Take My Life But Its Not a Crime Cause What i Done Was Right..//

This World Is Much Of Yours As Its Mine I got The Knowledge To Silence-Teachers..//
Even Though My Words Calm Down For Now Blood Is Spilling When The Vilence-Increases..//
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..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
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Post by LadySam »

this was alright, nothing bad but nothing special if u get me.
i liked the first few lines

All Races Just Seem To Egnite The Flame Racist Remarks Just Feed-The-Pain..//
I Wanna Quit And Leave The Game, Who cares bout skin couler when we bleed-tha-same..//
Were Out Of Minds We Need-a-Brain..We Gotta Keep It Real And Just Leave-The-Fame..//

i didnt really like the last bar. but thats just my opinion
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Post by SlickMex »

Aight I thought this was real good..like the topic n the multis were good to me..Uppin For Feed..
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

ur first bar was ok... then it just all went downhill from there
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Post by RH1NO »

nice drop flow was decent but multies were nice n topic stayed on point good job S.W.A.T.
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Post by drunken jesus »

EkomS wrote:ur first bar was ok... then it just all went downhill from there
basically, it wasn't awful it wasn't anything quotable either
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

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