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Yup I neva slack
ya boy talk like a pimp but he walk like a mack
step up on the scene not a flaw in my diamonds
yellow an white gold yea u kno I'm shinnin
blue rocks in my ears sometimes they be blindin
but enuff about me...nah neva that...
i run New york sumthin like a marathon
pullin hoes everywhere
do I have 2 carry on
explode on the track like I walk around wit bombs
weapons of mass destruction
when I bust in..
leave ya hoe wet an u lookin busted
soo 2 make a long story short ..
my rocks blindin people like they tannin on a beach resort...
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

''i run New york sumthin like a marathon''

first of all,no u dont.2nd of all this spit was pretty damn basic and u cant see the NY on my hat?dont get it twisted,dont rep ny with this garbage. this was bad compared 2 ur other shit,keep droppin i guess tho












{P.S. dont ever say u run ny again or im gonna knock u down like the towers}
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Ahahaha look at u hater...if u got nun positive 2 say..don't be postin dog..u give this site a bad name wit ur negativity..lol ur kinda funny lookin tho..

Ps.u can't run Ny when u have a butt chin...u look like the grinch..an the bottom of ur chin looks like a buttcrack...lol an my shits gota be all complicated 2 post sumthin? Soo wat if my shits basic...lol
Ok hater...
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i left u feed dont be a bitch,and why u checkin out my complexion?fuckin homo,love it or hate it,it's feed and if u keep ur lil prissy 8thgrade school girl attitude up im gonna shit on u
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No one is checkin out ur complextion homeboy trust me...an the only thing tramatik is how ur chin is like popin out the screennnn

An look u homo... see that penninsula u call a chin lmfao peAce outt lonG neck..

Take that picture down b4 someone mistakes that shit for floridaa...
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Post by MesaR »

dont write freestyles anymore.

take time and put effort into your bars not the first thing that comes to your head, peace.
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..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
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Post by pZy1 »

Lol y not?...this is suposed 2 be a creative sharing site right?...if I got thoughts an shit in my head ill post it..mayb someone will feel it..juss cause it aint ur taste or wat u think is "good" don't hate...

If u don't like it don't read it?
An wats up wit everyone givin me a hard time on this site...cool out
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Post by MesaR »

dawg i anit hating or giving you a hard time i am just being real wit you, stress less.

but with that stuff you wrote sounded something soulja boy would right..
and thats not good try to use multis and make ur bars the same length..

stay up
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Post by RH1NO »

Yup I neva slack
ya boy talk like a pimp but he walk like a mack
^^ FILLER

step up on the scene not a flaw in my diamonds
yellow an white gold yea u kno I'm shinnin
^^DO YOU KNOW HOW MUCH THAT WOULD COST

blue rocks in my ears sometimes they be blindin
but enuff about me...nah neva that...
^^FILLER

i run New york sumthin like a marathon
pullin hoes everywhere
^^ NO WAY

do I have 2 carry on
explode on the track like I walk around wit bombs
^^EXTREMELY BASIC PUNCH

weapons of mass destruction
when I bust in..
^^MORE FILLER

leave ya hoe wet an u lookin busted
soo 2 make a long story short ..
my rocks blindin people like they tannin on a beach resort...
^^ WEAK PUNCH TERRIBLE ENDING

SORRY BUT ITS BASIC BUT YOU HAVE POTENTIAL
PEOPLE HATE YOU FOR SOME REASON BUT THERE FEEDBACK IS TRUE
YOU NEED TA STEP UP YOUR VOCAB N FLOW
N WORK ON PUNCHES BUT ITS NOT TERRIBLE JUST NEEDS WORK N PRACTICE

KEEP DROPPIN
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Step up on the scene not a flaw on my diamonds yellow an white gold yea u kno im shinnin...

Do I kno how much it cost??lmfao

Actually I do..I got a pair of carrot each invisible set blue diamond earings..yellow an white gold 2tone cartiere bracelet...3 karrots in the bezzle of my aqua master watch with the same yellow an white gold 2tone..
****will take pictures of these items if needed

Y r u like breakin down my ryhmes...I don't see any of use doin that 2 anyone else...if u don't like it..then wateva...u don't gota try n breakdown mylines..its not that serious
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Post by Prophet »

Aight I'm gonna be honest, this was the worst drop I read from you, this verse was wack, it was really basic.
Just up your vocab, fix your structure, use punches, try using multies, and keep dropping.
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Post by RH1NO »

I BROKE DOWN YOUR BARS TA HELP THATS ALL

TAKE IT OR LEAVE IT DONT REALLY CARE
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Post by Momeijah »

Because People Go Blind When They're Tanning On a Beach.
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AKA SCOTCH HALL, MOE MEIJER & MOMEIJAH.
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i AM THE TOOTHFAIRY FAGGOT
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Post by pZy1 »

Corney...an yes domino...unleSs u have fuckin super vision...if ur layin down tanning..an the sun is blazin down...if u open ur eyes I doubt u can sEe...if u can...u must be eatin some super tea an krumpets...

U guys have nothing better 2 do then fester over my ryhmes..its kinda cute how u guys r jockin my shit...lol jokes

Like u have nothing better 2 do

Ahahahahahah u guys deffinatly get no pussy..
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