A Diss rap of Sorts

[~Symbolikull~]

This is what it is, and that… well that, Rap will Flip,
The script thats depicted when I tap my Battle Switch,
I stay burnin, yurnin to learn ur only hot when the Candles Lit,
The manuscript is that of this hits in which you couldnt Handle Bitch,
Im 30-9, and still workin to further my mind, yall Worthy to Rhyme?,
Its hurting ya spine, standin in line to get on stage where ur Surely Behind,
In talents -n- whits, most rappers have there Hidden Advantages,
But you jus keep getting cut up, sittin around in Stitches and Bandages,
Im blessed when im raged, IDK Why yall wanna Step in the Cage,
When yall don't aim led like a can a paint is yuh Weapon to Spray,
Ya structures are weak, so when you step to a heavyweight Im Throwin ya Back Out,
Ill puncture yuh cheek, and rip out yuh tounge till ur left Chokin like StackHouse,
Im the type to laugh out loud ina fashion of the Horrible in Sorts,
Its terrible I know, while yuh mothers cryin im the one Lowerin ya Corpse,
Its beautifully created, the masterpiece I carved leavin yuh Eulogy Belated,
Its truthfully instated, ya life was jaded, face it You were Bullied and Hated,
And ignorant child, an unscorned basterd the reason ya Daddy had Left,
After this diss hit you ya moms gonna be thankin me, Happy ya Dead!!!

[RH1NO]

this was solid

good ta see you droppin again

[Haz]

I Liked This Shit.. U Came Nice... Ya Multis Wus On Point in Dis Piece..

Im the type to laugh out loud ina fashion of the Horrible in Sorts,
Its terrible I know, while yuh mothers cryin im the one Lowerin ya Corpse,
Its beautifully created, the masterpiece I carved leavin yuh Eulogy Belated,
Its truthfully instated, ya life was jaded, face it You were Bullied and Hated,
And ignorant child, an unscorned basterd the reason ya Daddy had Left,
After this diss hit you ya moms gonna be thankin me, Happy ya Dead!!!


I stay burnin, yurnin to learn ur only hot when the Candles Lit,
The manuscript is that of this hits in which you couldnt Handle Bitch,
Im 30-9, and still workin to further my mind, yall Worthy to Rhyme?,
Its hurting ya spine, standin in line to get on stage where ur Surely Behind

Keep Droppin Homie ..

[B-Bear]

I honestly admire your vocab.. lol.. gotta say u're an articulate guy man.. wasn't the best of drops i've seen from u, still it's solid.. decent punches man! keep it up.. good to see you back droppin some verses!

[complexity]

Ya structures are weak, so when you step to a heavyweight Im Throwin ya Back Out,
Ill puncture yuh cheek, and rip out yuh tounge till ur left Chokin like StackHouse,

Nice line. Overall it was solid man.

I would avoid lines like this

"In talents -n- whits, most rappers have there Hidden Advantages,
But you jus keep getting cut up, sittin around in Stitches and Bandages, "

8.5/10. I wasn't feeling the diss much in this. I could be missing something.

[~Symbolikull~]

^^^WORD, yeah some might not be that good and ome may be great, i wrote this piece in all of 6 minutes, but i here what your sayin plex, anyways thanx to all of you who gave the feedback its appreciated