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this iz dedicated to my grandfather who recently passed away,leave some feed if ya want

i was told once i shud always sing or toast
but since i cant im gonna try to bring us close
to me ur always grandpa but ur a king'ta most
ur death hit me sudden,i hope u got wings as a ghost
so u can fly away,and still watch us from the sky but hey
DONT THINK FOR A SECOND im gonna let u die today
i never visioned id have to see u layin in a hearse
and forgive me if i start to cry while sayin this verse
but lord knows i wasnt ever prayin 4 the worst
wish i cudda hurd what u were sayin 2 the nurse
as they told u about all that damn final crap
this hit me hard,kinda like gettin a spinal tap
but i kno eventually down the line,time'll cap
all the memories in'a bottle so i can rhyme 4 that
feelin of closeure,but somehow im feelin closer
2 u,even tho ur gone im revealin my composure
so tell me man,is this justa test to release
the pain thats makin everyones chest kinda crease?
the lord and satan are fightin,i suggest they cease
at least for one day so hopefully u can rest in peace
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yeah

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that's tight man, it's gotta be the best ive heard since i been on here...yup yup
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Post by Haz »

so tell me man,is this justa test to release
the pain thats makin everyones chest kinda crease?
the lord and satan are fightin,i suggest they cease
at least for one day so hopefully u can rest in peace

NICE FINISHER^^^

Dawg u Brought Emotion across in This piece..

i never visioned id have to see u layin in a hearse
and forgive me if i start to cry while sayin this verse
but lord knows i wasnt ever prayin 4 the worst
wish i cudda hurd what u were sayin 2 the nurse
as they told u about all that damn final crap
this hit me hard,kinda like gettin a spinal tap
but i kno eventually down the line,time'll cap
all the memories in'a bottle so i can rhyme 4 that <<< Dis Shit wus Nice..

Dis Wus Deep.. Good Shit..
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Post by Momeijah »

Probably The Best Drop ive Seen From u.

Sometimes it's Hard To Put Real Emotion into ur Writing Since Words Can't Really Describe Emotions. But u Did it Well Here. This One Had a Clean Flow And ur Multis Were a LOT More Consistent Than ive Seen From u in Previous Drops. Also There Were No Filler, But Then Again Fillers Aren't as Common in Drops Like These.

ur Opening Bar Grabbed My Attention Well, ive Seen a Lot Of Attention-Grabbing Opening Bars in ur Recent Drops, Which is a Good Skill To Have Since it's Kicking The Whole Thing Off. My Favourite Lines Were:

i never visioned id have to see u layin in a hearse

True^, i Thought The Same Thing When My Grandad Died Last Year.

wish i cudda hurd what u were sayin 2 the nurse
as they told u about all that damn final crap
this hit me hard,kinda like gettin a spinal tap

Also Hits The Nail On The Head^, That 'Final Crap' is a Sugarcoated Version Of 'ur Gnna Die Soon'.

so tell me man,is this justa test to release
the pain thats makin everyones chest kinda crease?
the lord and satan are fightin,i suggest they cease
at least for one day so hopefully u can rest in peace

^Good Finisher.

Good Drop u Have Here And ur Showing Consistency. Like i Said My Grandad Just Died Last Year So i Nodded My Head a Few Times Reading This, And u Got The Feelings Down To a Tee So Props. Keep Droppin.
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AKA SCOTCH HALL, MOE MEIJER & MOMEIJAH.
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Post by Brah-Vo »

Awesome drop tramatik. You always manage to get emotion through. You make it look easy.
Sorry for your loss. I too recently loss my grandfather.
Keep up. Your best drop yet.
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Post by Glamtrash »

Thats amazing guy...You've got mad talent.
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

thanks 4 all the feed so far yall
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Post by complexity »

Nice job homie. You know, I am definitely feeling this.

And sorry about your grandfather.
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thanks 4 the feed plex & everyone else who left some
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