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Tramatik & Double FL - Come Back Home

Post by -TraMaTiK- »

this iz a collab double fl & i did on msn,goin back n fourth obviously,read the lil story n leave some feed 8)

Double FL = Blue
Tramatik = Red

listen ta me baby i kno u missin me krazy
but lately shits shady,no glissen ta save me
from the shadows that are stuck in my mind
im gone 2 long i kno but what the fuck im on the grind..


Damn kids are screamin for you all the time, the migranes got me goin blind
and once again this month the fuckin bills are on my credit line
I know what you're doin, i get why you're there
but what the hell am i supposed to do with three kids in my care?


u actin like i aint bringin food or shelta
or givin u ice 2 soothe ur hot mood n melt cha
but u gotta believe me i aint fallin 4 shit
and this hustlin thing'll stop cuz im callin it quits


For the past 3 years you been sayin that shit
when we found out i got pregnant with the twins
"baby, i love you, i'm done wit the game"
Swear to god that you'll lose us this time with no change


BUT IM SERIOUS,ill drop the drugs n stop the lies
wont work around the clock wit thugs cuz i got a surprise
for u and the kids,im gettin a job soon so cant i have a chance
2 bring this family closer and watch the kids,sing play n dance?


If I find one more number i don't know in the pockets of your pants
watch how quick your last chance at romance will vanish
I'll pack up the kids, all our shit, n i'll bounce
if i so much as suspect theres a gram of shit in this house


that sounds fair i guess i cant really fight with u
ur givin me a second chance 2 make things right boo
u kno how much i love u and id die for our son n daughters
i want those days back,were we sat n saw the sun across the water


I'm glad you know it's time for you to grow up and be a father
wonderin if i should bother, so sick of the drama
can't help but get caught up,You know you got my heart on reserve
so come back home and let's give these kids the raising they deserve
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Post by Momeijah »

Pretty Good. Tramatik This Wasn't as impressive as ur Other Recent Drops it Seemed Kinda Rushed And u Went From Topic To Topic Too Fast, Kinda Left Shit Hangin. it Was Good Yeah But it Just Lacked Something, Like u Weren't Really Trying. ur Flow Was Good For The Most Part But Some Lines Fell Off, Rhymescheme Was Fine Though, Take ur Time Next Time is All im Saying Haha.

Double FL u Came Real Simple So im Not Gnna Bother Commenting On The Rhymescheme Since u Haven't Advanced To That Stage Yet. But i Liked The Simplicity, The 'What u See is What u Get' Shit That is Pretty Consistent in ur Rhymes, i Say Keep That Style But Work On Flow, Vocab And Rhyming.

Overall, it Was Aright But it Just Didn't Uhhh... 'Do it' For Me. Tramatik ive Seen u Write These Collabs Before And They Were Better Than This, And Double FL u Should Definitely Use ur Poetry Skills in ur Rap Verses. i Say Both Of u Should Drop Something Like This Again.

6/10.
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