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Arvincible
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Spittinz [enter Arvincible...]

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This is going to be my first piece here, so let me know how hard it hits. Thanks.


When I pull it, people lay twisted where my bullets' ricochet hit 'em
With what I wish to say written, I'm condemned to spray victims
But may my flow fly, uplift 'em, ain't never lettin go of my spittinz
I'm cold hearted killin' and ya just been frost bitten
I'm so hot bitches blush, they wear mittens just to touch
Suck me off slurpin meat like an Icee sweet slush
I speak of myself highly, and leave ya main bitch smiling
I'm the type that's worth eying and you'll learn that I ain't lying
Did i forget to mention that I for one am special
I don't claim to be the best but i promise ya potential.


That's it for now. Haha
peace
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

this is aight kid, opener was decently ok, the middle bars werent very complex, kinda simple, the closer was your best bar, the one that actually said something that could be true. other than that jus keep droppin and takin the feed and youll get better dude
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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Post by Brah-Vo »

I like your style man.
And most def you got more potential.
I like how you droppin gangsta shit man but to me it just feels abit fake i dunno man.
But stay up. You could be one of the best rookies illest has seen.
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